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List of Presidents of Pakistan
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to featured list status. Please have your comments/suggestions for further improvement.

Thanks, Zia Khan 16:42, 18 January 2013 (UTC)

Giants2008 comments –
 * In the hatnote, should both words in "Governors-Generals" need to be plural, or just one?
 * "and executive authorizations on key matters requires the both consultation and final confirmation...". Make "requires" singular, and flip the order of "the" and "both".
 * "Pakistan has been shifted back to the parliamentary democratic republic." "the" → "a"?
 * "and performed ceremonial duties...". "performed" → "performs"?
 * "since the introduction of the post in 1956. The post...". Try to avoid having such close repetition of "post" like this.
 * "Three of them gained power through one of successful miltary coups in Pakistan's history". Add "the" before "successful"? And perhaps say how many coups there were, if a source can support it.
 * Couldn't find a source that support them all together. Zia Khan 22:13, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "The current President is of Pakistan...". Needs to be something like "The current President of Pakistan is...".
 * Yahya Khan entry: "He resigned as an result of Pakistan's defeat in the war." "an" → "a".
 * Pervez Musharraf: Add "a" into "and declared state of emergency."
 * "in order to avoid the impeachment." At a minimum, "the" should be removed; the "in order" could probably go too.
 * Publisher of reference 22 (The New York Times) should be italicized.  Giants2008  ( Talk ) 03:42, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments. Zia Khan 22:13, 21 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Passing comment: President should not have a capital P because it's being used in a general sense and not to replace the officeholder's name. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:14, 31 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. Zia Khan 17:24, 31 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * presidentofpakistan.gov.pk -> Presidency of the Islamic Republic of Pakistan
 * "Under this parliamentary system" - perhaps simply "under that system"
 * I would link figurehead, and perhaps name all figureheads in the lead.--Tomcat (7) 18:50, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
 * I didn't get you, could you clarify this?
 * I mean, I would link figurehead in the first occasion, and perhaps name in the lead all figureheads of Pakistan.--Tomcat (7) 21:22, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Done (only first part, I don't think the latter one is necessary).
 * Thanks for the review. Zia Khan 19:07, 9 February 2013 (UTC)