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List of The Bellflower Bunnies episodes

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've now included a title of episode titles, per Ruhrfisch's RFC suggestion. Now that the series finale has aired in Germany, I wonder if we're all ready for the triple crown yet?

See also this FLC page to see what went wrong last time, and tell me what still needs to be worked on.

Thanks, Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 11:42, 28 May 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: OK, here we go. I am going to go through each section and make comments. ''The first four episodes of The Bellflower Bunnies premiered on TF1, then ran on its children's channel TFOU TV (formerly TF! Jeunesse), and has since appeared on France's local Playhouse Disney. The series has also been broadcast on CBC Television in Quebec, KI.KA in Germany, Portugal's RTP in the Azores, and in several other countries. As of June 2008, 52 episodes have been produced, with four episodes airing in the first season, 22 in the second, and 26 in the third.[3][4] The complete series has only aired on KI.KA, where the last fourteen episodes appeared in May 2008,[3][6] while the first 38 episodes have aired in France.[5]''
 * I think a copyedit is the most pressing need. I don't really do copyedits on other's work, but the problem I see here is that some of the phrases are so unclear that it would have to be an interactive process - the copyeditor would ask you what was meant, you would reply, and the copyeditor would make the needed changes. The FLC highlights a number of these unclear places.
 * Copyeditors can be found by asking at WP:PRV or by asking one of the people listed at WP:LOCE directly.
 * A co-production between France and Canada, it is based on the Beechwood Bunny Tales books by Geneviève Huriet, Amélie Sarn and Loïc Jouannigot.  Would it be better to identify the television channels, so A co-production between France's TF1 and several Canadian companies, it is based on the Beechwood Bunny Tales books by Geneviève Huriet, Amélie Sarn and Loïc Jouannigot. ?
 * Suggest something like TF1 has been involved in the show's production since its premiere, with Valérie Baranski as the series writer, Patricia Robert as producer, Moran Caouissin as director for the first season, and Eric Berthier for the second and third.
 * The third paragraph of the lead is confusing - perhaps it could be rewritten as something like
 * I would then go on to briefly explain the first list (of titles in French / German / English) in the lead.
 * Another idea would be to give the titles in the list of episodes, always in the same order, so Episode 1 might be something like

and Episodes 27 and might be someting like Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:24, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
 * This would allow you to combine the French and German epsiodes lists from Season Three - just leave an n-dash – for the unknown French title and unknown official number in the "German" episodes.
 * If you choose to do something like this, the first list could be cut back to just a list of the thirteen episodes based on the actual books.
 * If possible, I would list the episode numbers for the DVD releases. For example, the first North American DVD has episodes 1 and 2.