Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Washington & Jefferson College alumni/archive1

List of Washington & Jefferson College alumni
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like it to be a featured list.
 * 1) I would like to know what things must/should be in the lead.
 * 2) For pre-Union graduates, I have listed which of the two colleges (Washington/Jefferson) the person graduated from. Does this look OK?

Thanks, GrapedApe (talk) 06:09, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

A few comments:
 * Recent featured lists no longer start with this list of..
 * Is there an external link for the article? (eg. the alumni association)
 * Surely there are fair use pictures that can be included in each section.
 * The lead photo is missing WP:ALT text.
 * Alumni should be sorted by their last name, not their first. Adding the sortname template should fix it.
 * Very few of the website references have accessdates.
 * There's instances of The New York Times and New York Times, it should be The New York Times throughout.
 * Endash should be used between dates.
 * I believe "Alumni association", in this context, used in the lead should be all lowercase, but I could be wrong.
 * References that cite a singular book page should be listed as p. not pp. Using "page", not "pages" in the citation parameter should fix this.
 * From the lead I understand what Jefferson and Washington are referring to but I have no clue what Canonsburg means, same goes for Dod and Smith/McMillan though I assume they compuses/colleges named after the founders.
 * Class year should be sortable, having the colleges on there prevents it from sorting properly. Using the sorting template should fix it.
 * When did John Watson, Samuel Lahm, William Stewart, James S. Rollins, James McGready graduate or attend?
 * Samuel Baldwin Marks Young, Robert Moore, be consistent and use "???" not "??".
 * There's no reference for Johnson C. Smith.
 * I would suggest putting the † notifier above the list, not below.
 * The first and second paragraphs spell out 'Washington & Jefferson College' third paragraph says 'W&J College', I would put 'Washington & Jefferson College' for consistency. If not you need to put something along the lines of 'Washington & Jefferson College (W&J College)' in the intro so that we know it will be used later on to describe the College.
 * Watch for stray punctuation at the end of the notability description.
 * Use the tools in the toolbox, to the right, to check dab links and references.

To me the colleges look fine (minus the issues mentioned above), same goes for the lead but prose isn't my strong point. If you want to expand the lead I would suggest working on the first paragraph since it could be longer and more descriptive. Questions that come to mind when looking over the lead: Did all of the founding college grant degrees, or did they issue certificates/diplomas, when did they start granting degrees, what was the first degree offered, is there one area that the college focuses on academically, is there an area academically that it is notable for, where are the students from?

You should consider taking off the red/black links, otherwise you are going to have to argue for inclusion if taken through FLC. You should take a look at recent FL's like List of University of Central Florida alumni, List of United States Military Academy alumni (academics), and List of alumni of Jesus College, Oxford: Law and government to get an idea of what current criteria is used for alumni lists. --ImGz ( t/c ) 19:52, 25 January 2010 (UTC)