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List of Weeds episodes
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I've made a ton of recent and major edits to it in the hope of getting it to FL status and would like the input of others to suggest additions in content (such as if the episode leaks discussed in the main article and the faux talk show Good Morning Agrestic should be included) or make note of errors (if the ratings section needs to be re-written, if the theme song/opening sequence sections need to be extended and if the episode summaries are appropriate).
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Thanks, The no erz (talk) 15:32, 31 December 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I have never seen this show. Sounds interesting. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
 * The lead image needs a fair use rationale or it will be deleted. It also seems to be much too big / high res for a fair use image. See WP:NFCC
 * I would probably put the year it started in the first sentence of the lead or least the first paragraph to provide context for the reader. As noted, I have heard of but not seen this and was not sure if it was even still on the air. Perhaps something like The American comedy television series Weeds was created by Jenji Kohan and has aired since 2005 on premium cable channel Showtime. See WP:PCR
 * Language needs a copyedit throughout - I had to read In season four — with the exception of the season premiere — "Little Boxes" and the opening sequence it was played over for the first three seasons were replaced with new opening sequences to reflect the show's change in setting.[18] several times just to figure out what it meant. Or this Taking a break from the development of her false bakery, Nancy goes out to a club with Celia and Conrad, who, later, have a sexual encounter. Andy is ordered to attend MA, where he begins a dishonest relationship with the circle leader. It is unclear in the first sentence who has the sexual encounter (three people are mentioned - this is SHowtime, so all three?). And "MA" is unclear in the second sentence - link it or spelll it out.
 * Since the opening and different versions of the theme song by different artists are important, they should probably be mentioned in the lead too.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 17:09, 13 January 2009 (UTC)