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List of awards and nominations received by Adele

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I am hoping this list will eventually reach FL status. I created a similar list for Rufus Wainwright and took it up to FL status, and I hope to do the same for this Adele list. Any feedback would be appreciated before making this article a featured list candidate.

Thanks so much! -Whataworld06 (talk) 23:37, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: This looks pretty good to me, here are some fairly nitpick-y suggestions for improvement.
 * I would split the lead into two paragraphs per WP:LEAD - following the model of List of awards and nominations received by Radiohead, perhaps put the music / album / singles in the first paragraph and the awards in the second.
 * Done.


 * Avoid words like currently in The Mercury Prize, formerly the Mercury Music Prize and currently known as the Nationwide Mercury Prize for sponsorship reasons, ... as this can get out of date quickly. Instead try something like The Mercury Prize, formerly the Mercury Music Prize and known as the Nationwide Mercury Prize for sponsorship reasons since 200X, ... (not sure what the year was)
 * Done.


 * I am not sure the level of detail here is needed in an article on Adele Andy Ruffell (former BMX Superstar and DanceStar Awards founder who left after the show peaked in 2001) would just Andy Ruffell (former BMX Superstar and DanceStar Awards founder) work?
 * Done.


 * Refs generally come after punctuation, so fix things like The MTV Video Music Awards were established in the end of the summer of 1984 by MTV[10] to celebrate the top music videos of the year.
 * Done.


 * Try this instead mtvU, a division of MTV Networks owned by Viacom, broadcasts a 24-hour television channel available on more than 750 college and university campuses across the United States. I don't think the second sentence is needed here and the external link to the Woodie Awards should be converted to a ref.
 * Done.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:27, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
 * In general I think less is better describing the awards - a bit of explanation is fine, but the focus should be on Adele and her awards / nominations.
 * Comment: Thank you so much for your time, assistance, and suggestions. Much appreciated! --Whataworld06 (talk) 04:15, 14 February 2009 (UTC)