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List of cities in Utah
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… I'd like to eventually nominate this list for FL. I've used the List of counties in Utah and List of municipalities in Tennessee as inspirations.

Thanks, Bgwhite (talk) 06:23, 3 July 2010 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: The table itself is superbly presented, but I have a couple of queries:-
 * The word "Eptymology", used as a column heading, is unknown to me (and to Collins English Dictionary). What does it mean? Should it be "Etymology" (study of the source and development of words and names)?
 * I assume all the entries in this column are cited to the Van Cott source, but could you check the name of the book? It is shown as Utah Place Name; is that right (not "names")?

On other matters:-
 * There is a disambiguation link that needs fixing. Use the toolbox on the upper right of this page to identify.
 * Some of the prose is awkwardly phrased, and other prose fixes are necessary:-
 * "Incorporated places in Utah are those that have a proposed municipal charter passed by a referendum vote of the affected population." Much clearerer to say: "Incorporation means that a municipal charter has been adopted by the affected population following a referendum"
 * "Cities and Towns..." Unnecessary capitlisation of "towns"
 * "On July 22, 1847, the first party of Mormon pioneers arrived into the Salt Lake Valley and made the first European settlement in Salt Lake City." You "arrive in" rather than "into". Rather than saying they "made the first European settlement in Salt Lake City", which sounds as though Salt Lake City was there before them, it would be better to say "...Salt Lake Valley, where they created Salt Lake City, the first European settlement."
 * "The largest city is the state's capital of Salt Lake City with a population of 181,698 and the former coal mining town of Scofield is the smallest with 26 people." I think you need to add the word "town" after "smallest", otherwise it reads as though Scofield is a city.

That's about all. We are very short of peer reviewers at the moment, and it would help us a lot if you could find time to review one of the backlog articles listed on the WP:Peer review page. Thanks, Brianboulton (talk) 21:34, 11 July 2010 (UTC)