Wikipedia:Peer review/List of unreleased Britney Spears songs/archive1

List of unreleased Britney Spears songs
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've worked on this article for a few days and based it on List of unreleased Michael Jackson material. However, since it's relatively short in comparison to Jackson's, I wanted an opinion about the prose and the possibilities of it being nominated for FL.

Thanks, Xwomanizerx (talk) 05:02, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: This looks good. The prose looks generally fine. I see what you mean about the brevity of the list. I don't think that alone would prevent it from becoming FL, but I'd suggest doing everything possible to make the article comprehensive.


 * You mention using List of unreleased Michael Jackson material as a model, and I see that the Jackson list has an interesting "Key" that includes color coding as well as special symbols for readers who can't see the colors. I can imagine a similar key for this list, although it would not include the two categories related to Jackson's deposition. It might, however, include categories for EMI, BMI, and so on. If you can track the data down, adding it would move the article closer to comprehensive and would make the table more visually appealing.


 * Can you find and add more data to the "Notes" column? An awful lot of the boxes are completely empty.


 * If you keep this image, I'd set the size to |thumb|300px| rather than just |thumb|". I'd look around for the best image I could find that fits the subject. This one may be the best available, but it looks like movement plus low-light conditions made everybody come out a little blurry but Britney.


 * "Examples include "Today", which Spears recorded in 1997 and was originally meant for Toni Braxton, and also snippets of "Rebellion" and "For My Sister", released on Spears's official website in 2006." - Possibly too complex. Suggestion: "In 1997, Spears recorded "Today", originally meant for Toni Braxton. Snippets of "Rebellion" and "For My Sister" were released on Spears's official website in 2006."


 * The ref numbers for "When I Say So" should be arranged in ascending order. [4] should come first, not last.


 * The books in the "Reference" section should include place of publication. If you don't have this information in your notes, you can usually find it via WorldCat.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 03:25, 7 December 2010 (UTC)