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Lobo (TV series)


This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because this article has been vastly contributed by anonymous IP users, and I cannot pinpoint what to do with this to improve the article.

Thanks, Starczamora (talk) 09:24, 28 February 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: The article is short and could be expanded, although I imagine waiting until the 25 episodes have all been shown would be useful. Some areas for improvement: Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 19:53, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * The article needs a copyedit for grammar and spelling. Please do not use characters like "&" for words like "and".
 * The lead needs to summarize the article and should not have material in it that is not also in the article itself (see WP:LEAD). I also think it should locate the series as bein made and shown in the Phillipines in the first sentence for context.
 * Story - usually this section is called "Plot". Needs to be written from an real-world perspective, i.e. from "outside the universe" of the show (see WP:IN-U). I found the plot very confusing and hard to follow - the Waya and Luna are mentioned in the second paragraph, but not explained until the fifth. We know Lyka and Noah knew each other as children in the second paragraph, but do not learn she thought he was dead then until the third.
 * Cast - is Extended Cast needed here?
 * References - very incomplete, internet refs must list the title, author (if know), publisher, and date accessed - please see WP:CITE and WP:RS too.