Wikipedia:Peer review/London Underground/archive2

London Underground
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… i feel the quality of this article has slipped significantly. I have tagged it with reference tags plus a couple others and left a small review on the talk page. It would be useful to se what could be improved more and where.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, Simply south (talk) 21:11, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: MIND THE GAP! (sorry, couldn't resist) The semi-automated peer review has a lot of good MOS suggestions. Here are some more: 1 Rail network 1.1 Individual lines 1.2 CLosed stations and parts of lines 2 Operation 2.1 Operational numbers (figures) 3 Technical (engineering) 4 History 4.1 First plans 4.2 Metropolitan Railway 4.3 Metropolitan District Railway 4.4 First Tubes und Electrification 4.5 Expansion 4.6 Second World War 4.7 Further development 5 Future plans 5.1 New rolling stock 5.2 Cooling (air conditioning) 5.3 Expansion of the lines / network 6 Accidents and catastrophes 7 The logo 8 Map of the network 9 Mind the Gap 10 Fare system 10.1 Oyster 11 Handicapped access 12 See also...
 * For as long as this is, it has few refs and there are several sections marked as needing refs. I would make sure every paragraph has a ref, as does every quote or statistric or extraordinary claim.
 * The references that are there need to be formatted to meet WP:CITE - for example internet refs need url, title, publisher, author if known, and date accessed. cite web helps, as do the other cite templates.
 * I think a map of the whole system early on would be very useful.
 * The lead is very choppy, but I would fix the whole article and then make sure the Lead summarizes it properly.
 * Per MOS, please don't repeat the article title in a header, so Travelling on the London Underground  needs to be changed
 * The FAR Featured article review/London Underground/archive1 has some excellent suggestions for improvement
 * The German Wikipedia article is featured there and offers some idea on organization that are lacking here. Here is a quick and dirty translation of their Table of Contents:

Hope this helps Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 13:42, 15 April 2008 (UTC)