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Lone Wolf (gamebooks)

 * This is one of my favorite book series, but the article does not do it justice. It needs some serious help, like what aspects need expanding? Judgesurreal777 21:21, 5 July 2006 (UTC)
 * Hello! Some suggestions:
 * Move the list of books into a seperate article (something like List of Lone Wolf books or whatever you think works). The list looks well presented and complete, so it might be possible to raise it to Featured List status without too much trouble if you wanted. Check out WP:WIAFL if you want.
 * The lead should be a summary of the entire article, so everything in the lead should be discussed later on in the article. With that in mind, it's a bit weird you need a citation in the lead. It might be worth using that line as inspiration for a new section within the article, something like The future of Lone Wolf ... or something :) I'll leave that bit up to you. Check out WP:LEAD too, it might give you some other ideas for the lead.
 * The Inspirations section is very short ... actually, it's just a quote. Could you maybe expand this a bit? Maybe some background too like when and how was the idea developed? Did the author have any trouble getting his ideas published? etc.
 * Other Media should be converted into prose. The list is already pretty good though so this shouldn't be too hard to do. A little expansion on each of the points would be good too - for example, the audio book, how was it recieved? Was there any demand before its release? etc.
 * The third point seems to contradict itself too. Did development stop or not? Maybe it was taken over by another company? Can you clear that up please.
 * Probably the most important thing I see missing, is how the books rate in the real world? Given the number of books I'd guess they do ok, but ... ? Has there been any controversy? The books have been around for over 20 years and are still being developed according to the article so there should be just heaps of material on this by now.
 * Be sure to check out Featured Literature for other ideas too. A quick browse of the topics covered by the articles in that section should give you a few ideas.
 * I hope that helps, cheers, -- darkliight [&pi;alk] 07:38, 8 July 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Andy t 23:47, 9 July 2006 (UTC)