Wikipedia:Peer review/Manchester United F.C./archive5

Manchester United F.C.
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it has recently undergone a period of quite rapid improvement. Aim is to get this article featured.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, Tomlock01 (talk) 21:15, 10 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Comment by Sandman:


 * The player records section needs proper citation going direct to the page in question.
 * Is the division between first league and premier league customary? Why not first division ~ 18? You don't divide CL and European Cup trohpies? Uninformed readers might think that first division is the second tier in English football.
 * Club officials need citation.
 * Club captain has a different source than the corresponding on list of Man utd players.
 * "In September 2006, a £56.5 million deal with current shirt sponsors AIG became the most valuable in the world" clarify please.
 * " making it the biggest sponsorship deal in football history" this is not supported by source.
 * "Ryan Giggs is the most decorated player in English football history."
 * "who demanded a then unprecedented level of control over team selection, player transfers and training sessions."
 * Avoid words like unprecedented unless it is in qoutes. You shldn't make that assertion yourself.
 * All in all, I'd go through all the facts again and find proper source.


 * ALL DONE! Tomlock01 (talk) 18:37, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Casliber
I generally look at comprehensiveness first


 * the Rivalries section is stubby. I'd add a sentence or two about the relationship with Man C (i.e. people like one and hate the other etc.)
 * The lead needs a bit of buffing. I might have a go at that myself