Wikipedia:Peer review/Manipal Institute of Technology/archive1

Manipal Institute of Technology
I've listed this article for peer review because…

because changes have been made to this site with respect to the older version also suggestions will be greatly appreciated

Thanks,

Binarymoron (talk) 14:19, 29 December 2007 (UTC)


 * Your biggest single issue here is neutrality and point of view. The article honestly reads like a recruitment website for the school. Just a few examples, with the offending words bolded:
 * It has an excellent  campus, with one of the finest infrastructure amongst engineering colleges in India.
 * With two beaches at a very convenient distance from the main campus, and a host of other natural green attractions (Sunset point, Peacock Point, End Point, etc), along with various recreational facilities available right in the campus, the campus life here is an experience of a lifetime.
 * New additions include the state-of-the-art Innovation Centre.
 * MIT offers an ambience that is unique.
 * The surroundings are very picturesque and there is a variety of things to do there and places to hang out.
 * Ideally situated amidst scenic beauty and rural surroundings, Manipal has all the modern facilities of transport, communication and banking. The surroundings are picturesque, comprising rural farmlands.
 * References, references, references! There are no references cited in the article at all in the article. You should cite references for all information not common knowledge to someone like me, who has never heard of this university before doing this review. See WP:REF for information on citing sources.
 * I kind of questioned whether the list of professors was needed. Unless the person is famous world or countrywide for some person, I don't know that they need to be mentioned on the page. If they are famous, get rid of the list and, in paragraph form, expalain why they're famous.
 * What's the university doing that's special? Are they doing any kind of research etc.?
 * Make your image smaller. As it is now, it's very cumbersome and takes up half the page.
 * Make sure to write out ordinal numbers (e.g. first instead of 1st) for any numbers under one hundred.
 * Watch how many times you use the word "it". Shake it up and, instead of using it, vary your word choice. For example, if it is referring to "the university," you might use "the university" or even "Manipal Institute of Technology" instead of the word "it."
 * Just as a footnote, you may want to see Massachusetts Institute of Technology for an example of what your article may want to shoot for as this has been classified as a good article and seems to be a similar school to this one.
 * I hope this helps. If you have any further questions, please don't hesitate to ask. -- Redfarmer (talk) 12:18, 30 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I hope this helps. If you have any further questions, please don't hesitate to ask. -- Redfarmer (talk) 12:18, 30 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I hope this helps. If you have any further questions, please don't hesitate to ask. -- Redfarmer (talk) 12:18, 30 December 2007 (UTC)