Wikipedia:Peer review/Martin Velíšek/archive1

Martin Velíšek
This is only my second article and I know there are problems with it, I would greatly appreciate if someone would be willing to take a look at it and set me on the right path in terms of form and links, etc. Many thanks, --grendelsmother 14:31, 25 September 2006 (UTC)
 * If this is your second article then I think you'll have a fine future as a Wikipedia editor. In order to lift the cleanup tag, I have two suggestions:


 * Neutralize the wording. One example of purple prose is ...where his conceptions adorn everything from the walls to the head-rests he invented for urinals.  There's a tone of praise in the use of adorn that doesn't fit very well in an encyclopedic article.  It would be fine to quote a source that praises him.
 * Cite sources and name examples. Per WP:WEASEL it's much better to put a statement about critical acclaim into the active voice and name the critic or publication.


 * If you'd like to raise this to good article status:


 * Create line citations.
 * Eliminate redlinks by creating stub articles.
 * Expand the coverage. Exactly what awards has he won?  What artists are his influences?  Create subheadings for his different media or his most important works.  Is there some notable aspect to his life other than art? (For example, Vladimir Nabokov was an avid butterfly collector).


 * This is a fine start for a new editor. Have a look at some of the biographies that are already FA or GA and use them as models.  Best wishes,  Durova  06:28, 27 September 2006 (UTC)