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Master Chief (Halo)
I've listed this article for peer review because I'm trying to get it into shape for Featured Article status. Since it's about a fictional character, all the annoying but vital aspects of WP:WAF apply, so I guess the question is how does it do in terms of out of universe. One note: I know the "...in other media" section is too brief right now, but anything else, point out here.

Thanks, David Fuchs ( talk  ) 15:27, 31 August 2007 (UTC)


 * I love the first few sections. It would be nice, though, if the lead were rewritten to actually pay attention to those sections, as opposed to being primarily a lead for the in-universe material instead of the (very good) out of universe material. Then we come to the in-universe material - I see no sections under Appearances that could not be at least a paragraph shorter, and suspect that most of those sections could get by with a paragraph overall. Finally, some sections about Master Chief as a popular culture icon would be warranted. Phil Sandifer 15:45, 31 August 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 17:21, 31 August 2007 (UTC)