Wikipedia:Peer review/Max Stuart/archive1

Max Stuart

 * The article has been passed as a Good Article. I would appreciate comments as to how to improve it further.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:13, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and may or may not be accurate for the article in question (due to possible javascript errors/uniqueness of articles).


 * Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
 * Although the lead has only one para, I think it is adequate for the article, covering the scope of the issues.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:27, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
 * I will check--A Y Arktos\talk 00:27, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
 * There is a picture on http://www.eniar.org/news/murdoch2.html but it dates from 1972 and is definitely not public domain. There is also some sensitivity about pictures of Indigenous Australians, although as far as I know that is only when they are deceased.  Stuart is still alive.  I haven't found any appropriate free use pictures.  The article is illustrated further down but these are not suitable for the lead.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:27, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * There may be an applicable infobox for this article. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
 * I don't think Template:Infobox Biography is appropriate - no image and he hasn't died, all relevant info in lead.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:29, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18&amp;nbsp;mm.
 * fixed one instance, didn't find any others--A Y Arktos\talk 00:47, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * As per WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using January 30th was a great day, use January 30 was a great day.
 * fixed--A Y Arktos\talk 00:38, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Per WP:MOS, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example,  ==The Biography==  would be changed to  ==Biography== .
 * I think the definite article is warranted in the sub-heading The Stuart Case, but happy to take feedback.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:32, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Please alphabetize the categories and interlanguage links.
 * fixed--A Y Arktos\talk 00:41, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
 * It has been has a cite against it. The use of the word alleged is also justified I believe  in the context altough no specific cite uses that form of words.  Suggestions as to how to rephrase would be useful--A Y Arktos\talk 00:56, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
 * I have had a go. As this is an article about an Australian, Commonwealth English spelling applies. --A Y Arktos\talk 01:20, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
 * You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions (and the javascript checklist; see the last paragraph in the lead) for further ideas.
 * Thanks, Andy t 00:18, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
 * Thank you - the suggestions were helpful--A Y Arktos\talk 01:20, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * As Andy suggests, it can be improved by removing excessive links to solitary years. A monobook tool allows this to be done with one click on a 'dates' tab in edit mode. You can then accept or reject the changes offered and/or do more editing before pressing 'Save'. Simply copy the entire contents of User:Bobblewik/monobook.js to your own monobook. Then follow the instructions in your monobook to clear the cache (i.e. press Ctrl-Shift-R in Firefox, or Ctrl-F5 in IE) before it will work. bobblewik 17:44, 21 June 2006 (UTC)