Wikipedia:Peer review/Meg White/archive1

Meg White
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I working on getting all the White Stripes related articles at least to good article quality. I realize this article is not quite there, but I've made strides to add sources and flesh out the complete story of her career, and since I am pretty much the only editor working on the article (other than the occasional bot) I would like a second (third, fourth...) set of eyes to weigh in on weak areas.

Thanks, Esprit15d • talk • contribs 17:23, 14 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review) Hope that's helpful, and good luck! &mdash; Cirt (talk) 19:41, 25 October 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 2) Checklinks tool shows a few problems throughout with dead links and slow links. I strongly suggest archiving as many as possible with added parameters archiveurl= and archivedate= with Internet Archive links.
 * 3) Per WP:LEAD, consider expanding the lede intro sect, (four paragraphs), so it may function as a standalone summary of the entire article's contents. Specifically, 2nd and 4th paragraphs are a bit skimpy.
 * 4) 3 total images used in article, those will require an image review at either WP:GAN or WP:FAC, suggest you go over all those image pages and make sure all fields are filled in and all licensing checks out okay.
 * 5) Plot summary looks a tad bit skimpy, could be expanded a bit more, perhaps one more paragraph.
 * 6) A few one-sentence-long-paragraphs and other short paragraphs throughout, consider expanding and/or merging them up.
 * 7) References sect combines both harv citation notes and full references in same sect. Recommend splitting into 2 sects, Notes and then References, per models at WP:FAs including: The General in His Labyrinth and Mario Vargas Llosa.
 * 8) I see two citation needed tags in article.
 * 9) 6th paragraph of The White Stripes sect has uncited sentence at end of paragraph, as well as the citation needed tag.
 * 10) Other work sect has lots of uncited sentences and facts with no sources cited.
 * 11) Personal life sect has uncited material in 1st paragraph of sect.
 * 12) Strongly recommend removing quote box from Personal life sect -- they don't like those at WP:FAC.
 * 13) Equipment sect, suggest blending into main article body text in chronological order instead of in this sect.
 * 14) Equipment sect, 1st paragraph in this sect has lots of uncited material and facts with no sources cited.
 * 15) Awards and nominations -- BIG PROBLEM HERE. This entire sect is unsourced at present.
 * 16) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!