Wikipedia:Peer review/Melodifestivalen/archive2

Melodifestivalen
The article was promoted in 2007 and since then has significantly updated. After giving a quick read, I have noticed some of the materials unsourced and therefore I believe it would be communities best interest to have a peer review and decide if the article is worth delisting. Thanks, IW. (talk) 23:04, 21 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Previous peer review

Comments from Eisfbnore


 * You need to ensure that the article doesn't contain close paraphrasing, even when it's been translated from Swedish. For instance Medverkande artist måste ha fyllt 16 år före den 10:e maj 2007. is a bit too close to To be eligible, songwriters and performers must be at least sixteen years of age on the day of the first Eurovision semi-final, even if it's purely factual and straigthforward. YMMV.
 * Also, the article relies rather heavily on a 13 year-old source, "Inbjudan till Melodifestivalen 2007", which for obvious reasons can't cover statements like the 2012 contest marked the first time foreign songwriters could submit entries.
 * I'm also worried that the article hews to close to Swedish syntax rules, rather than English grammar. For instance let's have a look at this para:

"After SR staged the 1975 contest in Stockholm, left-wing groups argued that Sweden should not spend money to win and host Eurovision again. This led to mass demonstrations against commercial music and the organisation of an anti-commercial Alternativfestivalen.[12] Therefore, Sweden decided not to send a song to Eurovision 1976 but returned in 1977."


 * There are certain elements of this type of writing that sounds a bit off to my ears. Also, I don't think "anti-commercial" is idiomatic English. Better with 'non-profit', 'anti-consumerist', or something like that.

That's just a handful of comments from me – I haven't spent that much time reading the article, so I might revisit the page on a later stage, if you wish. Eisfbnore (会話) 06:47, 15 April 2020 (UTC)