Wikipedia:Peer review/Mercury Grand Marquis/archive1

Mercury Grand Marquis
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it has undergone some major revisions and cleanup and I am interested in seeing what kind of work needs to be done to upgrade it from B-Class (its status for several years) to something higher.

Thanks, SteveCof00  "suggestion box" 09:57, 26 May 2014 (UTC)

Comments from LT910001
Wow! , you are clearly very passionate about this topic. I'd encourage you to aim for good article status, which is a reasonable goal this article could definitely work towards. As a lay user who doesn't know too much about cars, after my skim of the article I have a few thoughts:
 * Firstly, the article is full of jargon that is difficult for me to understand. For example, "After the discontinuation of the Crown Victoria at the end of the 2007 model year, the Grand Marquis had largely taken its place as the entry-level Panther-platform model." and "With the discontinuation of the Mercury brand, the Grand Marquis ended retail production in October 2010 while production for fleet sales continued until January 2011.". What are fleet sales? What's a "model year"? What's an "entry level car"? These could be made more accessible by:
 * wikilinking some of these terms, as could quite a few additional parts of the article.
 * Adding additional sentences that flesh out what you are talking about
 * Writing in full sentences (cfr. "Introduced as a running change late " --> "The 1986 was introduced..."
 * This article has a lot of images. If you're going to nominate for GA status, then these all need to be freely licensed. I haven't checked, but am letting you know as otherwise it may come as a surprise during the review. In addition, you might consider using Gallery to represent images, although this is really a matter of taste.
 * I would consider renaming "Year to year changes" as "Timeline" and possibly putting this in a single section, split into subsections by era, with a gallery to represent images. It's a little strange to see the timelines bespeckled throughout the article.
 * As this is an encyclopedia for general use, I'd just note that this article contains a lot of details (for example "For 2006, revisions to engine tuning added 4 hp to both versions of the Modular V8, for a total of 224 and 239 hp, respectively. After the 2007 model year, the 239 hp version of the Grand Marquis was sold exclusively for GCC export."). I don't normally see this level of detail in a good article, and am not sure that it is necessary. I suggest localise these in a single section. If you're interested, have a look at some existing good articles about cars here: WP:GA
 * Lastly, if you are considering GA, then you will need to use inline sources to support the majority of your text

I hope this feedback is useful. Most of what I have said is really a matter of taste, so I hope you can extract something useful from it! There is clearly a lot of work that has gone into this article and I am sure that it can make it to GA with the proper preparation. Kind regards, --LT910001 (talk) 23:33, 6 June 2014 (UTC)