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MileagePlus
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… I've worked on this article for quite a while, hoping to create a comprehensive article on the topic and eventually to get it to FA/GA. Would like some feedback on quality/future direction. Thanks, Anti I A (talk) 12:50, 22 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 11:49, 1 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Lead image caption should not take a period.
 * Lead is a little brief, the second para is only one sentence long. Have you checked out WP:LEAD to see what we'd expect?
 * Lead could more adequately summarise the article, e.g. cover a little of the history (not just the format of the member IDs), leading members, benefits etc.
 * "Frequent flier programs started in their current form" who started the first one?
 * " ten million actual flown miles" why "actual", what's wrong with just "ten million flown miles"?
 * "United's number one customer" sounds a bit adverty.
 * "reaching the ten million mile number" replace number with "landmark" or "mark".
 * Check refs are formatted correctly, preferably using a cite template, and don't just use bare URLs which suffer from linkrot.
 * "for prices as low as $69," reads like an advert.
 * "even when elites are still being processed on the upgrade wait list." don't even understand this.
 * Partner Airline in col heading should just be Partner airline.
 * Star Alliance Member -> Star Alliance member.
 * Table should comply with MOS:DTT for screen readers by implementing row and col scopes.
 * Don't over link articles, e.g. you link United Airlines twice in quick succession in the Award travel section.
 * Premier status section could use more references.
 * Overall there needs to be some attention applied to making it sound less like an advert for the scheme.
 * "Million Miles and Beyond" almost reads like a copy-and-paste from the MileagePlus website.