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Mississauga
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I want to run this article for GA sometime, but I first want some more tips to improve the article. Mistakes are easier to identify by another person. I want suggestions mostly on the references, and the coverage. Any other info is welcome too.

Thanks,  TheQ Editor    (Talk) 21:29, 1 August 2014 (UTC)

Comments by Cas Liber

 * Am not a fan of "most xxx city" rankings listed by various magazines and chambers of commerce etc. Not sure whether the lead warrants 1 or 3 paras devoted to these..surely there are some other factoids...?


 * Be worth pointing out in the lead (and body I guess) where it is in relation to Toronto (East, West etc.)✅


 * Paras 3, 4 and beyond in the History section need inline citations.✅


 * To make the prose flow smoothly, the two isolated sentences after para 5 in the History section should be expanded or merged into another para. Look at the content and see what you can come up with.✅


 *  were amalgamated by a somewhat unpopular provincial decree in 1968 to form the Town of Mississauga.  - more info here...curious....


 * More uncited paras need citing in geography


 * Is it flat or hilly? Soil type?


 * There is an expand tag in the economy section. Not sure what else should go here. If you feel nothing then remove the tag..


 * Politics...is itr mainly conservative or left-wing...

Prose is fair overall and is good enough for GA at first impressions. The size indicates you have some room for expansion if need be. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:59, 23 August 2014 (UTC)