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Mobile Suit Gundam 00

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review due to the edit war that happened some time ago between Collectonian and Jtrainor. Collectonian tagged this article with the justification that it suffers from several problems, so I've decided to list this article for peer review in order to seek help and advice on how to improve this article.

Thanks, Frozen Slime (talk) 13:41, 15 July 2008 (UTC)


 * I am not sure whether that is the correct justification for requesting a peer review, but here goes (Note that this review is not complete, and that further input will be required. I did not review the actual content in detail.):
 * ...first to be set in a non-fictional era (Anno Domini).\The series is set in a futuristic Earth ...—These facts seem to contradict one another.
 * The original air dates (first season) should be provided in the lead.
 * Ensure that the article follows the manual of style (Wikipedia:MOS-ANIME#Layout for a series article).
 * Update the Non-free / fair use media rationale (See Image:Mew_Mew_PS_Game.jpg for an example).
 * The article requires a copy edit.
 *  apparently selling — WP:OR?
 * 2nd, 7th ... spell out numbers lower than ten.
 * The primary protagonist of the show.  — Fragmented.
 * He owns an orange Haro to aid Gundam Dynames' defense and movement when sniping.  — Fragmented. (There are more examples.)
 * is told told in the format  — word duplicated
 * Instead, it reveals and discuss the — discusses.
 * There are too many one or two line paragraphs.
 * References should be cleaned up (e.g. 42, 43, 44: Only the title have been provided.)
 * The article (esp. the plot section) needs serious cleanup.
 * There are way too many consecutive links in certain areas, for instance four consecutive links in First Season.
 * The article should be rated as C class, in my opinion.
 * It seems to me that the article contains quite a bit of possibly irrelevant material:
 * 世界経済連合, sekaikeizairengō?, abbrev. ユニオン Union, lit. World Economic Union
 * I do not think it is necessary to list the countries in these factions.
 * I cannot make proper sense out of the plot section, as it concentrates to much on details, and very little on the overall plot.
 * The article does not seem comprehensive. I am left wanting further information.
 * G.A.S 16:35, 15 July 2008 (UTC)