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Monkey Gone to Heaven
A single by the American alternative rock band Pixies. Looking to take this to featured status soon, so I would appreciate comments on its comprehensiveness and prose. CloudNine 13:07, 13 August 2007 (UTC)

Peer review by Midnightdreary

This is a great song, and a great article. Here are some suggestions:


 * I think the intro can be a tad longer before it's brought to featured status. My suggestion would be to introduce the themes of the song sooner, before the details of the vocalist and producer. See WP:LEDE for other suggestions.
 * Done. CloudNine (talk) 14:55, 7 December 2007 (UTC)


 * It's probably not easy considering the nature of the song and the band, but more sources would definitely help throughout the "Background and lyrics" section. It suddenly occurs to me, though, that the two topics really have little in common. I think Wikiproject Songs should do more in suggesting better headings and sections but I digress. What makes more sense to me would be a "Overview" section with subsections for "Background" (origins of song) and "Lyrics and themes" and maybe "Musical structure" ("Melody" section currently) or something. Breaking them up like this would allow you to really see what needs expansion and, hopefully, encourage that expansion. It's a big change which may or may not be feasible, so consider it thoughtfully. Either way, great use of sourced quotes throughout those related sections. The "Melody" section definitely needs some work as far as sourcing.


 * "Recording and production" section could use more sources, even just for minor snippets of info. Two sources for a section this important is kinda low. The final paragraph is written very anecdotally (hey, my spellcheck confirms that's a real word) rather than encyclopedically (not a word, apparently).


 * "Video" - Eh, I'm not a video expert. It might need some info about the video's production rather than just the observational summary. Who directed it? Budget? That sort of thing. Also, "simple affair" sounds like either original research or non-neutral. Maybe I'm exaggerating, but it just shows the importance of referencing.


 * "Reception" is great, very thorough. If you happen to come across a negative review, do add it to maintain balance. I would consider merging "Accolades" as a subsection here. Credits look great where they are.

Overall, a good article, very easy to read and interesting. Keep up the good work and consider some of my suggestions. As much as it pains me to say it, look at "Hollaback Girl" for a featured song article. Follow their formula and you may be on your way to getting this to FA too. Best of luck! --Midnightdreary 12:34, 2 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your comments! Apologies for not acknowledging earlier; in my opinion the "Video" section is the weakest, and it's the one I've been meaning to improve. (I'm also going to expand the Accolades section; I tend to keep it seperate, see Doolittle (album) and Surfer Rosa) CloudNine 18:11, 6 September 2007 (UTC)