Wikipedia:Peer review/Mukhannathun/archive1

Mukhannathun
What I am looking for is guidance from anyone who is knowledgeable of this subject matter. Secular GLBT editors, Perhaps a more traditional muslim scholar. Such people could give feedback on the content of the article. Specifically the gender identity and sexual orientation of the Mukhannathun. I have read many websites on this. Some that are by conservative scholars are very frank in saying that these men were not straight but they were not openly flaunting sodomy either. Some websites by Muslims who are GLBT make these people out as being totally equivalent to transsexuals if the author of the webpage is a transsexual. Others by GLBT muslims interpret them as simply being very flamboyant homosexual males. Still others deny that the mukhannathun were any kind of GLBT person at all. Given the many and varied interpretations of this subject matter I feel it would be prudent to solicit comments from any experts wikipedia may have on Islam. I myself being a MTF transsexual who is a muslim will see things differently to other muslims and other GLBT people.

Furtheremore I am looking for criticism of the generally structure flow and dynamics of the writing. Is it any good? Should I have summarized the passages I quoted? Should I somehow seek pictures of the subject? etc. etc. Hfarmer 00:30, 23 June 2007 (UTC)

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