Wikipedia:Peer review/Multnomah County Sheriff's Office Search and Rescue/archive1

Multnomah County Sheriff's Office Search and Rescue
I've listed this article for peer review because i have been working on it for almost 6 months now, and have had little to no insight from any other editors. I would like to get this article up a class or two but are not sure how to expand or improve it at this point in time.

Thanks,

Tiptoety (talk) 00:29, 18 December 2007 (UTC)


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Una Smith

 * Well, for starters an encyclopedic article normally will have a History section. This article clearly needs one, and some topics it might address include:  why was the group formed?  for what purpose?  did it fulfill its original purpose or has that been redefined over time?  how?  something many SAR units have trouble with is inclusion of women:  did the original bylaws specifically exclude or specifically include women?  how about black men?  how about "Oriental" men?  Say something about the  connection with Boy Scouts;  does it still exist today?  how does it work?  do teenagers get out of school for SAR missions?  Can they respond at night?  How do you handle the logistics of having many SAR team members too young to drive a vehicle on a public road?  does the group in fact have a lot of young team members?  Does their youth nececessitate special procedures for missions that may involve a suicide or other highly sensitive, damaging mission scenario?
 * I think Tiptoety wants to write an article about this group but has not yet "discovered" what to write. Currently it is rather a list of factoids and boilerplate info gathered from the unit's website.  Is this article intended as a recruiting tool for the group?  If so, it does not belong on Wikipedia.
 * The article needs references. Only one of the items now treated as references seems to be a true reference.  Most of the others are external links to the group's website or to other groups' websites.  Appropriate references would include historical newspaper articles about the group's adventures in SAR or local politics or whatever it does that is notable.  Or, if you can get the group to deposit its old bylaws somewhere public, you could then cite them.
 * The one real reference appears after something about hundreds of homicides being solved by the group; IMO  finding evidence during a search of a crime scene does not equal solving the case.

--Una Smith (talk) 04:37, 21 December 2007 (UTC)