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Mysore
Mysore is an Indian city in the state of Karnataka. This article has undergone several rounds of copyedits, and has all the major sections that are typically present in an Indian city article. The article is also equipped with a variety of images related to various aspects of the city, and finally it is well referenced. I request the review comments from the community, so we can improve this article further and fill in the loop holes, if any.

Thanks, KNM Talk 17:12, 14 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments by User:Dwaipayanc

 * The data of religions break-up is needed.--Dwaipayan (talk) 03:15, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 08:34, 27 November 2007 (UTC)


 * Metric units have been used. also give english equivalents (miles etc). Although have not gone through the article thoroughly, it looks to be all set for FAC. Cheers!--Dwaipayan (talk) 04:34, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 17:05, 19 November 2007 (UTC)


 * Comments on History section: "Following rendition, Mysore became the capital of the kingdom in 1881 when the British handed over power to the Wodeyars."—Which rendition?
 * ✅. Reworded the statement -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 17:48, 20 November 2007 (UTC)


 * "Most present-day historical landmarks, and the organisation of the city of Mysore, were inspirations of the Wodeyar kings and their Dewans. Plans for organised development of the city exist from around 1904. The period between 1910-1945 is considered important in the modernisation of the kingdom"—Language needs improvement. can be shortened, because the three lines convey similar meanings, and to some extent, vague.
 * ✅. Removed the statement -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 17:48, 20 November 2007 (UTC)


 * History is incomplete. Anything on independence movement? Where is the post-independence history/recent events?
 * ✅. Have covered the Indian Independence movement. Important events in post-independence have been covered in the remaining sections. Again adding them in this section would be duplication -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 02:19, 21 November 2007 (UTC)


 * The last paragraph in history tells about the palaces. No need to discuss palaces at length in History. Move some things to culture. --Dwaipayan (talk) 16:26, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 17:15, 19 November 2007 (UTC)


 * Comments on Geography: Units needs Non-breaking space, and English equivalents. Template:Convert covers both issues. --Dwaipayan (talk) 16:30, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 17:05, 19 November 2007 (UTC)

Follow up Hi! I am sorry I could not go through the article. Please feel free to strike off my comments that have been attended to. One question. You say that important events post-independence have been covered in other sections. Can you please specify what other events have been covered? I see the political parties mentioned, and the Kaveri water dispute mentioned. IMO, Kaveri dispute should be in History section. because, usually the history section should contain notable events till date, and Kaveri dispute definitely should be there. Has there been any notable riot/calamity/political upheaval post-independence?
 * The significant events covered are Kaveri riots (now mentioned in History section as well), establishment of a Mysore city corporation, hosting of National Games and downturn/growth in industries. I want to keep the Kaveri riots in Demographics section since I feel it is relevant to that section. Political upheaval is more related to the politics of a state, I could not think of anything that is related to the city of Mysore. I have added some events in the History section that got good attention from media and the public in the recent past. I need to add citations though, which I will do tomorrow. -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 18:05, 21 November 2007 (UTC)

Additional comment Can you dig out the crime stats of the city? In demographics, can you find out the percentage religions? Indeed, the last two sentences in "demography" (maybe with some modifications)is better suited for "history". There are some WP:MoS issues regrading the use of endash.--Dwaipayan (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Have added some crime stats. I need to source the data on percentage religions. I have used the autoPR javascript to correct MoS issues. Do let me know if you see any specific MoS issues -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 18:05, 21 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Quick example of MoS issue: "The annual budget of the Corporation for the year 2007-08..." it should be an endash between 2007 and 2008. And I did it. I could not go through the whole article :( Hope to go through it in the FAC :) Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 00:15, 22 November 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅. OK, I have corrected the emdash issues. -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 08:37, 22 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments by User:AZPR

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 * ✅ -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 15:08, 20 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments by User:Amartyabag

 * Single years must not be wikified.
 * Thanks for your comments, Amartya. For wikilinking single years, I am following this guideline which says Stand alone months and days of the week should generally not be linked. Stand alone years do not need to be linked but some users prefer it. I am however open to removing the wikilinks if it is not considered as a good practice. Thanks -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 11:11, 3 December 2007 (UTC)


 * Though it is not necessary for FA, it will be great to have all the red links turned blue. Amartyabag   TALK2ME  09:30, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- ¿Amar៛ Talk to me / My edits 15:12, 4 December 2007 (UTC)