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NXIVM
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Thanks, Chrisrus (talk) 17:40, 29 November 2011 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:39, 12 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Comments
 * Some spare whitespace at the top of the article looks weird.
 * " It offers classes and seminars that encourages" encourage.
 * Two disambiguation links (surgeon general and Stephen Cooper).
 * Very brief lead, could be expanded.
 * Why unlink New York in the infobox but link US?
 * "Some of its clients include " -> Some of NXIVM's clients...
 * "manual to others. [8]" remove spaces between punctuation and references.
 * References need consistent date formats, need to have full parameter lists, i.e. publisher, work, accessdate, publication date, author etc wherever applicable.
 * "The three critical articles " not NPOV, just stick to "Three articles..."