Wikipedia:Peer review/Narnia (world)/archive1

Narnia (world)
Hoping to get this article up to GA and, eventually, FA status. I recently merged two articles to get this one, and the shakiest part of the move was the History section. --Fbv65 e del / &#9745;t / &#9755;c || 20:32, 23 September 2006 (UTC)
 * It seems to me that the article deals with strict canon — the seven books — but in the beginning maps created for the movie are used. Did Disney strictly follow the books creating them? Perhaps they took some freedoms? The article says nothing about that. // Duccio 16:46, 24 September 2006 (UTC)
 * I'm not too sure about those images, and that's something I need to look into. However, the caption of the second image reads, "Traditional map of Narnia (top); map released to promote the 2005 Narnia film (bottom)." They are slightly different; thus, I would assume that the filmmakers took some liberties. I suppose there should be a section on the accuracy of artwork/maps. --Fbv65 e del / &#9745;t / &#9755;c || 16:51, 24 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Narnia (world): "...the one Nikabrik brought to council in Aslan's How in Prince Caspian, and other evil beings which might be classified as witches under our cultural definitions..." that is extremely POV, perhaps the author of that sentence meant western culture? European culture? American culture? C.S.Lewis's background culture? // Duccio 16:56, 24 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Some stuff is a bit too in-universe: present tense would be better, as is a bit more context to elements of history: why is the land often under siege and evil? Referencing too: what were some of Lewis' inspiration is something I'd like to know too. Wiki-newbie 19:51, 24 September 2006 (UTC)


 * [Wikipedia:Manual of Style (writing about fiction)] - Read this carefully, this article has a long way to go, starting with a major restructuring. Also, take a look at something like this Palpatine or Spira. Judgesurreal777 03:34, 30 September 2006 (UTC)

Most of what I was going to say was mentioned already, but here is some more:
 * The introduction seems rather short for such a long article.
 * A section on history of the acutal development of this world by CS Lewis.
 * Also, as Wiki-newbie said, you should mention where its inspirations were derived from; maybe you could re-use Narnia for this.--Konst.able 13:46, 7 October 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 03:39, 15 October 2006 (UTC)