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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because…I would like to polish it up to the highest standard possible.

Thanks, Seahamlass (talk) 15:33, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

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Hello Seahamlass, here are some comments which may help you on your quest for one of those little bronze stars...! That's a good start for you. Let me know if you need anything more from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:11, 20 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Per WP:HEAD, you should avoid over-capitalising, so "Early History" should be "Early history" etc.*:✅
 * Any chance of making the co-ordinates at the top of the page read in degrees, minutes, seconds with a N for north and W for west? I think you can modify it to be coords dms if memory serves...Sorry: Really sorry, can't work out how to.
 * The WP:MOS recommends that you don't "squeeze" text between two images. With thirty images on this page, it's probably over-illustrated so try to avoid having images squashing the text.*:✅
 * "Chapel Lane" - why italics? same with all the other italics in the early history section, is there a good reason for using italics here? Reply: Sorry - thought I had to do that to street names, have now removed the italics*:✅
 * Curiously, despite my previous point, I would think that "Nafni+by" should be, at least, in quotations perhaps also italicised.*:✅
 * "October 17th" - October 17 or 17 October, but ditch the "th" - see WP:DATE.*:✅
 * Ref [15] is used twice for the quote, no need.*:✅
 * Image:Stpeterchnav.jpg you say you have written permission to use this. Does Wikipedia also have that written permission? *:✅ Reply I have written permission for all the photos used. I'm happy to pass that on to Wikipedia, but not sure how to do that.--Seahamlass (talk) 16:45, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * RAF wasn't formed until 1 April 1918, so the fledgling RAF didn't exist in 1917...*:✅ Changed to the Royal Flying Corps and the Royal Naval Air Service.
 * Argh, "WW1"? Generally British English would refer to this as the "First World War".*:✅!
 * "8 for World War Two" - "eight for the Second World War"*:✅
 * Ensure that image captions which are fragments don't have full stops and image captions that are grammatically complete sentences do have a full stop.*:✅
 * Does Wikipedia have permission to use Image:Navenbywitch.jpg?*:✅ Reply Yes, I have an email from the Portable Antiquities Scheme, granting me permission to use it on Wikipedia.
 * Governance paragraph has several short paragraphs, could do with merging them to make the prose flow better.
 * Not sure of the style of these articles but in the topography section, I'm really not keen on the in-line link to geographical co-ordinates. Reply: I don't like it either much, but I have noticed in other peer reviews that editors have been told to put it in, so I think I had better keep it.
 * No spaces between citations please, so [36] [37] needs adjustment.*:✅
 * Not sure I understand your source for climate statistics, "Source: MSN Years on Record: 11"? Can you clarify?*:✅ Changed and simplified.
 * "next 5 years " five years.*:✅
 * Can you link to something relevant for "Grade II listed" and be consistent with II-listed and II listed.*:✅
 * "It is allegedly ..." something like "It is claimed to be..." with appropriate citations would be more encyclopaedic.*:✅
 * Numerical ranges should be separated with an en-dash, not a hyphen, so "aged 5-15" should be "aged 5–15".*:✅
 * "rate was 3" - 3 isn't a rate, it needs a "per..."*:✅
 * "20.18 km" - use the convert template for the imperial-ists amongst us.*:✅
 * "now 47.9% do" - now? needs context, like, As of March 2008, ...*:✅
 * 1859/60 - 1859–60.  There are others...*:✅ - Several anyway!
 * "1832.[63]x " - what's the x?*:✅ Random character removed!
 * Avoid bullet point lists in potential FA's when prose would be better.Fixed them.*:✅
 * Culture and community section could use some work on prose, merging paragraphs, reducing the over illustration.*:✅: Took out a couple of pictures, merged paragraphs, removed bullet points etc.
 * Shouldn't Under 11 be Under-11? Not sure myself...*:✅ Looks better like this anyway!
 * "Tracey Duxbury " - again, why italics? *:✅ Correcte - italics removed.
 * Trim the external links to those directly relevant.*:✅