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Nestory Irankunda


I have listed this article for peer review in hopes of making it a featured article in the future. Any comments on how to improve is welcome.

Thanks, JC Kotisow (talk) 06:23, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

Comments by SafariScribe

 * While the lead needs rewriting, the third paragraph, "Irankunda was announced to join Bayern Munich in July 2024 for an undisclosed fee, presumably, breaking the A-League transfer record" is too short and should be merged with the fourth one.
 * This line, "Born in Tanzania, Irankunda has represented Australia at youth level" should go to the second paragraph. Second paragraph is the line after the infobox
 * Also add the Tanzania part where he was born and link them. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 14:57, 27 April 2024 (UTC)
 * @SafariScribe Thanks for your comment. I have reworded the lead according to your views. JC Kotisow (talk) 01:52, 29 April 2024 (UTC)

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I added this article to the FAC PR sidebar. Please consider reviewing articles on that list. Z1720 (talk) 17:37, 2 May 2024 (UTC)


 * It has been a month since the last comment. Are you ready to nominate this article at FAC, or are you still looking for comments? Z1720 (talk) 01:24, 30 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @Z1720 I'm still looking for comments for improvement but I might jus nominate again JC Kotisow (talk) 01:34, 30 May 2024 (UTC)
 * I suggest seeking a mentor who can comment in this PR, and asking for feedback in the Wikiprojects attached to this article. I also suggest reviewing WP:FACs while you wait, as this will help you learn the FA criteria and build goodwill amongst other FAC reviewers. Z1720 (talk) 01:43, 30 May 2024 (UTC)