Wikipedia:Peer review/Nintendo 3DS/archive1

Nintendo 3DS
Would like to run this through GA and then maybe FA but I need suggestions on how to get this article ready to meet those criterias. So give me specific exact advice on how make this a GA and then FA article. Thanks.

Thanks, JC7V (talk) 06:05, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

Comments by David Fuchs


-- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 17:35, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
 * High-level thoughts :
 * I don't know if this is a project-wide choice or not, and feel free to correct me, but the tense for large swaths of this seems a bit weird. This model isn't produced anymore, so to describe its competition as the Vita (which is imminently not going to be produced either) and as "succeeds" the DS rather than "succeeded" seems off.
 * Likewise, "The handheld offers new features"—"new" to what? It's years old at this point.
 * The background section is waaaay too long a section considering it's not talking about the 3DS specifically but rather Nintendo's previous efforts. That should get condensed down to a paragraph at most and merged with development.
 * Other spots of excessive detail include: listing all the games given to ambassadors in the "Launch" section, detailing rumors of the XL model which turned out to be true, and so should just be covered in a line or less; the game card having its own subsection; the paragraphs of detail for system software when there's a separate article for it; etc.
 * There's a lot of useless dates and figures cluttering up the article. Frankly, exact dates are not all that useful or relevant and come off as supremely repetitious when used repeatedly. At the very least, stuff like The Nintendo 3DS launched in Japan on February 26, 2011, priced at ¥25,000. On March 25, 2011, the system launched in Europe, with pricing set by individual retailers. On March 27, 2011 the Nintendo 3DS launched in North America, priced at US$249.99. On March 31, 2011, the system launched in Australia and New Zealand, priced at A$349.95. The system originally launched in all regions in both Aqua Blue and Cosmo Black color variations. can and should be rephrased to not repeat "2011" after every single territory launch, because it should be understood. Do I need to know the exact length of the stylus?
 * Prose :
 * The prose needs a major overhaul. In addition to the tense and dating issues, there's a lot of sections that just read like the fossil record—sequential layers of "on date X Y happened", and are about as exciting.
 * A particular problem with this article is unneeded and redundant phrasing or bits, such as It is also pre-loaded with various applications including these:, The XL version however, is 156 mm (6.1 in) wide, 93 mm (3.7 in) broad, and 22 mm (0.87 in) thick., and The Nintendo 3DS input controls include the following : a round nub analog input [...] There are times when you quote whole lists but still use "include" at the end like you haven't mentioned everything. WP:REDEX would be helpful practice here.
 * Why does the reception section discuss the original SKU and XL model, but not any of the other ones you included in the hardware section earlier?
 * The "legal issues" section at the end feels very much like every controversy section: ungainly, not integrated into the rest of the article, and weirdly stuck at the end. This should go somewhere else, and it should be cleaned up (it appears to reference an entirely different court case before the next sentence talks about the previous one.)
 * References :
 * There's a lot of unreferenced statements, or statements that are cited to a ref but is not covered.
 * Inconsistency in citation schema that should be addressed.
 * What makes Modojo.com, Nintendo World Report, Vooks.net, IndustryGamers, BrightSideofNews, WirelessGoodness, Game Usagi, or COGconnected reliable sources?
 * Some of the archive links (e.g. ) don't actually work and thus don't cite the material in question.
 * Weasel words: Some sources claim that an 8 GB version could be produced should a game ever require it.—given that an 8GB card apparently never came out, and the fact that only a single supplier is being used here, a) I think you need a better source for the previous info, and b) I'm wondering why this is relevant.
 * Images :
 * Most of the images look fine, but File:Nintendo 3DS Home Menu.jpg really doesn't have enough of a fair use justification at present to merit inclusion.