Wikipedia:Peer review/Obesity/archive1

Obesity
This article has had a previous FAC, which failed for various reasons, such as paucity of pictures and lack of hard statistics on prevalence. I'm trying to finally lift this vital health topic to Featured Article status. At the moment it needs more historical/cultural emphasis ( may help here), some pictures (of people!), some hard stats. I think the science is basically done (e.g. metabolic syndrome, leptin/ghrelin/etc), but for encyclopedia use it needs wider scope. All help appreciated! JFW | T@lk  23:50, 24 May 2005 (UTC)


 * A couple of points/suggestions from my first scan which hopefully will be useful:
 * The lead pic is of the fat mouse, animal obesity is mentioned in the lead but not really expanded elsewhere in the article. Most of the causes and complications associated with obesity are the same in animals and humans. So either more needs to be added on animal obesity or the article should be exclusively about human obesity.
 * You will need to use a footnote or inline reference system, especially where statistics are quoted. Innote and Footnote4 seem like good choices.
 * Is there sufficient litterature to warrant a section on the genetic aspects of obesity?
 * Pics I could think of, BMI from, and mabye a picture of one of the drugs. A graph obesity in different countries would be neat, OECD data for 2003 can be found here
 * Does it need a discussion of first world vs third world? This series of short articles on the growning problem of obesity in the third world is good and this WHO project seems interesting too, it'd be good to get a hold of the data thats it's generating. Also much of the data presented is on the US, similar data exists for most OECD countries and should be represented where possible.
 * Where practical lists should be turned into prose.
 * That should keep you busy and has made me alot more interested in the topic--nixie 03:03, 25 May 2005 (UTC)


 * I also remembered on my way to lunch that there are countires where until recently obesity was still a socially positive thing, like in the Pacific Islands of Tonga and Samoa--nixie 04:03, 25 May 2005 (UTC)
 * To respond: animal obesity is not a serious concern, and perhaps a small paragraph should be inserted. Footnotes are indeed important. The genetic aspects are very poorly understood; perhaps a mention of polymorphisms in particular genes is useful. Practical lists should stay this way to remain systematic. I'll have a go at the worldwide data at home when I can draw a graph. JFW | T@lk  10:46, 25 May 2005 (UTC)
 * I've added a graph based on the OECD data to the article. Feel free to replace it with a more complete graph if needed. Phils 14:20, 25 May 2005 (UTC)

Have you consediered merging the etymology into the definition?--nixie 07:10, 26 May 2005 (UTC)


 * Seems a bit US centric. Do you have info on obesity in other parts of the world? Mgm|(talk) 10:47, May 26, 2005 (UTC)

Update: progress has come to a standstill. I've had great difficulty finding good historical references and worldwide statistics, and was wondering if anyone could chip in here. JFW | T@lk  09:08, 22 Jun 2005 (UTC)


 * Have done lots. It is coming along.-- Doc James  (talk · contribs · email) 23:15, 13 January 2009 (UTC)