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On a Clear Night
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'm hoping to nominate it for GA soon and would like to know if there's anything more I need to do. Comments/suggestions on prose quality are especially welcome.

Thanks, Beloved  Freak  20:20, 30 April 2010 (UTC)

Comments by H1nkles

I think the article is ready for WP:GAC. I'll make a couple of suggestions but for the most part I think it's pretty solid.


 * I'm not sure why you included the "Ten Days" song information from the previous album. It doesn't seem to fit or lead to any further information about this album.
 * Watching using a gender neutral term like "they" when referring to the reviewer at Billboard. It comes across as awkward.  Can you determine the gender of the reviewer?
 * There should be a reference for the Personnel section. Track listing I assume comes from the album cover.
 * Did she tour on her own for this album? She toured as an opening act in the US for 10 months but what about solo?
 * I note you use the non-breaking space between No. and a number for example "No. 10", when describing chart success. I'm not sure this is necessary.  Usually non-breaking spaces are for a unit of measurement like hours, liters, inches, years etc.  See WP:NBSP for more on this.  It shouldn't impact you at the GA review but if you wish to push up to WP:FAC it will impact the review.

I think that's it for me, the article looks pretty good. Congratulations. If you found the review helpful please consider reviewing another article from the Peer Review page or at WP:GAC, this will help reduce the backlog. If you have specific questions or concerns please contact me on my talk page as I don't usually watch pages that I review. Good luck. H1nkles (talk) citius altius fortius 19:11, 7 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for a helpful review.-- Beloved Freak  19:13, 7 May 2010 (UTC)