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Once Upon a Time in Springfield
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'm hoping that it will reach GA status

Thanks, NoD&#39;ohnuts (talk) 18:26, 26 July 2010 (UTC)NoD'ohnuts

"Note to NoD&#39;ohnuts: Peer review is backlogged at the moment, which could mean delays of up to two weeks before articles can be reviewed. You can help, by choosing one of the articles in the backlog, and reviewing it. Please consider doing this, so that delays are minimised. Brianboulton (talk) 23:44, 30 July 2010 (UTC)"

Finetooth comments: This sounds like a funny episode, and the article seems reasonably well-done although thin. It would be good to make it a bit broader, but it may be hard to find material about individual episodes, especially in a series that has run for so long. Here are a few suggestions for improvement:

Lead
 * "and is currently nominated for a two awards" - Rather than saying "currently", I'd specify the year.

Plot
 * I'd be inclined to merge the one-sentence orphan paragraph at the end of this section with the paragraph above it.

Production
 * This is an awfully short section. Could anything be added to make it more complete?

Cultural references
 * This one is even shorter. I don't know if you can find anything else that can be reliably sourced.

Images
 * It is not your fault, but the quite nice image, File:Anne Hathaway at the 2007 Deauville American Film Festival-01A.jpg, of Anne Hathaway is licensed at the original Flickr site as "non-commercial" (NC) CC-by-SA 2.0. (You can check this by clicking on the "Some rights reserved" license link on the Flickr page for the original.) The non-commercial clause makes it unusable on the Commons and on Wikipedia. The Commons uploader probably did not know about the NC problem. Unless you can persuade the Flickr uploader to re-license the image without the NC clause, it should be deleted.

Reception
 * "In all, the show was watched by 21.007 million viewers" - Should that be 21 million rather than the odd decimal fraction?
 * "The episode ranked 8th in the ratings becoming the second highest viewed show on FOX and top rated scripted show on FOX. The episode also came in 5th for the 18–48 rating becoming the top rated scripted programming of the week with a rating of 9.084 million watching and rating of 6.9." - These two sentences are too complex and run several different concepts together in a confusing way. I'd suggest re-writing them to make them more clear. Would it be helpful to include a brief explanation of the ratings and how they work? What, for example, are the differences among a "watching" rating, a "rating of 6.9" and an "18–48 rating"? They seem to be three different things.


 * "TV Fanatic sated "Well, as compared to any other episode, "Once Upon a Time in Springfield," was a fantastic outing by The Simpsons." although like Jason Hughes hated that The Simpsons weren't in the main plot." - The sentence does not make sense as written. "Sated" is a typo for "stated", and "although like Jason Hughes hated" seems to be missing a word or words.


 * "TV Fanatic gave the episode an A and stated in it's review" - "Its" rather than "it's".


 * "Anne Hathaway is also nominated for Outstanding Voice-Over Performance for her role as Princess Penelope running against Simpson cast members" - Misplaced modifier. Princess Penelope isn't running. Re-cast for clarity?

References
 * "Ponywether, Ariel (January 13, 2010)" - The date formatting in the reference section should be consistent. This one should be flipped to match the others. Ditto the first date in citation 14.
 * Citation 11 needs an author name. Some of the others may too. Generally, web citations should include author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and date of most recent access if all of these are known or can be found.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR. That is where I found this one. I don't generally check corrections after my reviews because it's too time-consuming. Please ping me on my talk page if my comments are unclear or if questions arise. Finetooth (talk) 18:12, 5 August 2010 (UTC)