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One Tree Hill (song)
This peer review discussion has been closed. Hello, here is "One Tree Hill" for your perusal. I've turned it from a fairly 'meh' article into a much more detailed one that is now a GA. I don't think it is too far away from FAC, but I would love to see some reviews on it first. The prose is my number one concern (while I love building articles, I usually screw up the writing part of it somehow), with a secondary concern being the quality of the lead (the part I always have the most difficulty with). I'd love to hear your thoughts!

Cheers, Melicans (talk, contributions) 06:18, 24 October 2011 (UTC)


 * I think it is well written. I have two gripes.  In some parts, it feels like a quote farm ("X says ....  Y says ....  Z says ....  A says ....  B says ....").  I feel one can have three successive quotes before the "quote-farm" feeling sets in.  This happens about three times (in the first three sections), although the first (U2's emotions over the roadie's death) seem reasonable.  The second gripe is sort of minor; I think the first paragraph of Composition and theme is a bit over detailed with the timings.  Other than that, it is a fine article (and quite easy to follow).  I think the fair use rationales for the non-free media are adequate (although the cover image should be reduced in size).  Jappalang (talk) 09:33, 2 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review! I see what you mean about the quote-farming. Definitely something for me to work on before heading to FAC. If there's anything else that you see, please don't hesitate to mention it! Cheers, Melicans (talk, contributions) 16:02, 2 November 2011 (UTC)