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Only Girl (In the World)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to take this to FAC, but I want someone to review this article who is very familiar and experienced with the FAC process and to really scrutinise the article as if it was actually going through the FAC process.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!  18:11, 15 August 2011 (UTC)

--Efe (talk) 13:02, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * through The Island Def Jam Music Group I think that should be Def Jam only. Its the label that releases singles and albums. --Efe (talk) 13:12, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!
 * with Rihanna choosing it for inclusion before she had recorded it a case of a n+ing phrasing. A guide is here: User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing. --Efe (talk) 13:12, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!
 * as well as the direction of moving away from the darker themes which were present on Rated R (2009) I think that should have been saved for the album's article. --Efe (talk) 13:12, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * No I don't agree, because this is the first song from the album after Rated R (even LTWYL was quite dark in it's theme), Only Girl represents the first song to move away from her darker material. Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!
 * Well, it seems like I'm reading a review for the album, not for the single. Presently, that review was nor established in some way to connect with the song. --Efe (talk) 13:26, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

Partial for now. Just ping me when I need to respond. My watchlist's getting longer. Thanks. --Efe (talk) 13:12, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * "Only Girl" debuted at number seventy-five on the US Billboard Hot 100 and peaked at number one in its eleventh week, giving Rihanna her ninth number one single on the chart, as well as peaking at number one on the Hot Dance Club Songs and Pop Songs charts. Perhaps you could trim this down. Like directly saying that it topped the chart on its eleventh week. Those sub charts too could be removed, and saved for the appropriate section below. --Efe (talk) 13:12, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * *: Done (To a degree). Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!
 * and filmed outside of Los Angeles exactly where? --Efe (talk) 13:12, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * It was undisclosed as far as I know. Rihanna said in a interview "we found a couple of landscapes a couple of hours outside of Los Angeles." (Says in the Music video section..) Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!
 * The song was performed for the first time on Saturday Night Live. The song was also performed on series seven of The X Factor in the United Kingdom and at the 2010 American Music Awards in Los Angeles as part of a medley with "Love the Way You Lie (Part II)" and "What's My Name?". Could be entirely removed. --Efe (talk) 13:15, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Noo, I'm keeping the Live performance sentence. Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!
 * Up to you. --Efe (talk) 13:26, 28 August 2011 (UTC)


 * That table for the awards could removed, too. Just incorporate the fact in the prose. --Efe (talk) 13:15, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!  17:36, 27 August 2011 (UTC)

Could someone else participate in this please? Calvin  &bull; Na Na Na C'mon!  10:57, 5 September 2011 (UTC)