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P. G. Wodehouse
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P.G. Wodehouse was a prolific author whose career stretched from his 1902 novel The Pothunters, through over ninety books to his unfinished 1977 novel Sunset at Blandings. In-between he brought, and still brings, joy to millions through the stories of Bertie Wooster and his valet, Jeeves; the immaculate and loquacious Psmith; Lord Emsworth and the Blandings Castle set; the disaster-prone opportunist Ukridge, the Oldest Member, with stories about golf; and Mr Mulliner, with stories about many things from film studios to the Church of England. He was also much admired by his contemporaries, many of whom publically acknowledged Wodehouse's talent. A misguided action during the Second World War saw his popularity take a large knock, especially in the UK, but he was forgiven, both by the public and officialdom over time.

This article has undergone a major re-haul recently, bringing it up to scratch and much more appropriate for a writer of his ilk. Pip pip! – SchroCat (talk) &  Tim riley  talk  ,  20:55, 8 June 2015 (UTC)

Image review
 * File:PGWodehouse.jpg - Anonymous works, especially those from as recent as 1904, can't be PD-70. We need more information. Proof this was published before 1923 for the US copyright, and (to host on Commons) evidence that the the author is indeed not known.
 * We inherited this from the previous versions of the article. I have searched as best I could for a better PD image, without success. I checked more than 1,200 eBay images, Library of Congress image archive, ILN archive, and Play Pictorial archive. No PD image can I find. If the present image can't be shown to be PD does that mean we can substitute a copyrighted image under the plea of fair use in the absence of a PD picture of Wodehouse?  Tim riley  talk    10:42, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I've covered a fair amount of ground trying to fnd something on the background of this and come up with 100-150 copies of this image, but no useful details. I still needto go through my books (later today) to see if they can shed any light on it. - SchroCat (talk) 10:47, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Good news. The ever-brilliant has found a pre-1923 publication carrying the image. I've updated the information box on Commons and put in an PD-US tag. - SchroCat (talk) 20:21, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * May I add my grateful thanks to ? Very much obliged!  Tim riley  talk    20:53, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * File:ThePothunters.jpg - Who's the cover artist? Is s/he listed?
 * As with the My Man Jeeves image, mentioned below, I'll check in the British Library. I much doubt that the illustrator will be credited, but one never knows.  Tim riley  talk    11:11, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Artist is R. Noel Pockock. See . Dudley Miles (talk) 16:21, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * According to this, Pockock died in 1915. If this is true, and he did the cover art (not just the illustrations), then the cover should be free in the UK. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 16:53, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * , are the tags OK on this and File:A Prefect's Uncle 1903.jpg, given he's the cover artist on both? Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 07:40, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The PD-1923 templates are correct. If we can confirm Pockok died in 1915, that will allow us to upload the image to Commons too. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 07:45, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * But if he didn't die in 1915 but much later, surely we are OK on here with the PD-US-1923-abroad tag? Isn't this designed for such situations - published outside the USA prior to 1923? It obviously can't go to Commons, but I thought we were good to use it here? (I'm off to lie down shortly with cooling towels on my forehead, so much does the convolutions of copyright law hurt my head!) - SchroCat (talk) 08:29, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, PD-US-1923-abroad is correct and acceptable. I'm just hoping that we can, in the end, know what the UK status is. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 08:34, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * OK, I'll dig some more. There's nothing too obvious coming up, but I have some searches still running, so may know something soon. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 08:52, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * File:Psmith-1909.jpg - When did T M R Whitwell die? This will allow us to determine when the image will be PD in the UK. Also, should note that this is cropped from the original (here)
 * I looked into Whitwell when I ran across this image, but I found no personal information about him. I didn't find anything by him from much earlier than this, which makes me suspect he was youngish at the time, but that's the merest guess. I'd alter the note on the image page as you suggest.  Tim riley  talk    07:38, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * File:My-man-jeeves-1sr-edition.jpg - How do we know the image was uncredited? Has anyone checked this edition?
 * I'll order it at the British Library, but I shall be mightily surprised if the artist was credited. Established houses like Newnes had their own art departments who worked anonymously. Nevertheless, we shall see. More on this later in the week.  Tim riley  talk    07:38, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * According to this, when it apeared in The Strand Magazine first, it was illustrated by Alfred Leete (1882–1933). Strand was also produced by Newnes, so they may have used Leete's artwork (and may just have easily not have used it!) - SchroCat (talk) 08:43, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * As I might have guessed, the British Library's copy of the first edition has no dust-jacket. I don't know where this leaves us. I still think it unlikely that the jacket artist was credited, but then I didn't expect the cover artist for The Pothunters to be credited, and he was. Anyway, at least we've tried to establish the facts.  Tim riley  talk    12:15, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * File:Tom-powers-bea-lillie.jpg - Is the photographer credited? I'd personally use an information template to make the page look neater.
 * Most of the images in the 16-page article are uncredited, but four of them (of which this isn't one) are credited to Foulsham and Banfield. My guess is that they took the lot. I'll add an info template and mention F&B, stressing that they are only possibles, not definites.  Tim riley  talk    10:47, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * File:61031-CLT-0025-01 Fort van Huy (2).jpg - Fine.
 * File:Duff Cooper 1941.jpg - Fine
 * File:Wodehouse blue plaque.jpg - Fine
 * File:Intrusion of Jimmy p073.jpg - Should have complete bibliographic data (title of the book, edition, location of publication, page number, etc.) You're claiming only PD-1923, so the fact that the book is an American publication is really important. (It's the plate after page 60 if you forget).
 * Done - SchroCat (talk) 08:08, 9 June 2015 (UTC)


 * File:A Prefect's Uncle 1903.jpg - Again, complete bibliographic data would be nice, as would an information template. Any idea who the cover artist was? — Chris Woodrich (talk) 01:51, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I think R. Noel Pocock, but I'm not 100% sure. - SchroCat (talk) 08:17, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Would be nice to have, if you can get it. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 08:28, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Rest of the details added: will search further for confirmation of the illustrator - SchroCat (talk) 10:19, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I'll add this to my list for checking at the BL once I'm back in the Metrop on Thursday.  Tim riley  talk    11:16, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * It is Pocock. I have the first ed. I have a few firsts including The Gold Bat and can upload further images if you wish. Dudley Miles (talk) 16:21, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you, Dudley, for these very helpful additions. I hope we can twist your arm into commenting on our prose too, if you have time.  Tim riley  talk    16:49, 9 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments
 * An excellent article. A few quibbles.
 * I have all the Wodehouses (I think) apart from the Globe By the Way Book, the only one which has never been re-published. However my fanatic phase is long ago so apologies if I get things wrong.
 * The Commons link is to an old page.
 * Now replaced. - SchroCat (talk) 19:21, 9 June 2015 (UTC)


 * There are two short story collections not in the works template. Tales of Wrykin and Elsewhere, latest issue is by Everyman, Kid Brady Stories and a Man of Means, Everyman is first pub.
 * You may be interested in the recently re-worked P. G. Wodehouse bibliography, which is currently at FLC. (Now added, by the way) - SchroCat (talk) 19:42, 9 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "The talks were comic and apolitical, but broadcasting over enemy radio was contrary to UK law." It is many years since I looked into this, but as I remember the issue was a claim that the talks were pro-Nazi rather than a technical issue about law. Note - I see that this is what the main text says below. I did not see anything there about broadcasting over enemy radio being against the law.
 * Tweaked. They weren't pro-Nazi - very neutral, but it was the fact they happened, rather than anything else. - SchroCat (talk) 19:21, 9 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Is the account of his early career a bit anodyne? As I remember (again) the semi-autobiographical Not George Washington presents him as a not-too-scrupulous writer on the make.
 * Cards on the table: I haven't read Not George Washington, but PGW co-wrote it with Herbert Westbrook, whose name comes first on the title page and who was something of a chancer à la Ukridge. I wonder if it was he whose character peeps out in the book. I drafted the para in question, and I honestly think I've represented Donaldson and McCrum faithfully here. –   Tim riley  talk    16:17, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * According to David Jasen's intro in my copy, published by Continuum, Westbrook (Julian Eversleigh in the book) supplied the plot and Wodehouse (James Orlebar Cloyster) wrote it. However, I do not know of any source commenting on the book - apart from Jasen citing as a real life example of the plot Wodehouse publishing under Westbrook's name and they divided the proceeds - pretty innocuous. Dudley Miles (talk) 17:30, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * D'Oyly Carte - No "sir I grow thinnah and thinnah"?
 * Tempting. Shall consult my conscience. Throughout the drafting of this rewrite it has required strict self-discipline to refrain from adding too many glorious Wodehouse phrases.  Tim riley  talk    16:17, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Having wrestled with my conscience I think we must deny ourselves the pleasure of this quote (particularly as - see footnote - there is some doubt which of the Carte brothers was quoted to Wodehouse.)  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "He returned to England, where he rejoined The Globe" - when?
 * Shall add after the necessary rummage through my shelves.  Tim riley  talk    16:17, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Added.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I think the account of the 1910s does not give a picture of his work then. It was a period when he was experimenting with different styles (as I think he says in one of his prefaces) - some more successful than others, and when he mixed comedy with social criticism. A prime example is my favourite pre-WWI novel, Psmith Journalist, with its expose of corruption in New York politics, also Something Fresh, where the portrait of the snobberies and jealousies of the servants (based he said on his childhood much of it spent below stairs at the houses of his aunts and uncles) is a different world from Beach in the later Blandings novels. Another example is The Coming of Bill with its expose of health faddism (which I see is mentioned below). (Of course I know this is just my opinion - you have to base the articles on RSs.)
 * Yes, you're right. It isn't OR to say that Psmith Journalist mixes comedy with social criticism,and in any case it will be easy to find a citation to back the statement up. Similarly your general point about his experimenting with genres. I'll ponder and draft something.  Tim riley  talk    16:17, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Now done - satisfactorily, I hope...  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Was not Ethel Wodehouse disliked by his friends?
 * Not as far as I can remember from the sources I've consulted.  Tim riley  talk    16:17, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "the publisher Michael Joseph identifies that Wodehouse understood human nature" A bit clumsy - rare in a very well written article.
 * Tweaked - SchroCat (talk) 19:51, 9 June 2015 (UTC)

Dudley Miles (talk) 18:17, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks Dudley - much appreciated. I'll leave some for TR to sort out. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 19:51, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * My thanks too, Dudley. I'm away from my books till tomorrow, and will enjoy grappling with your insightful comments then. (First editions, forsooth! I knew we'd be up against formidable expertise when we dared to tackle this article.)  Tim riley  talk    21:08, 9 June 2015 (UTC)
 * It is worth looking at the DNB article at . Dudley Miles (talk) 13:31, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I think we've addressed all your points (to your satisfaction I hope). Thank you very much for some shrewd pointers.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Wehwalt
Just to get things started, more soon:
 * Lede
 * "joint British-American citizenship". "Dual" for "joint" in my view, unless this is the British term.
 * "although he slowed down in old age" strike "down" as needless.
 * Both tweaked - SchroCat (talk) 07:44, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Reluctant banker
 * " it was well received and launched a theatrical career that spanned three decades" With admiration for the prose, I must in candour point out there's some ambiguity as to whose.
 * True. Amended.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)


 * " is partly based on Herbert Westbrook, with whom Wodehouse collaborated on The Globe, and co-wrote two books, two music hall sketches, and a play, Brother Alfred, between 1907 and 1913." I think you're trying to do too much in the part of the sentence after "Westbrook" and I'm not sure the structure supports it. Possibly recast?
 * I concur. Now split.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "to add topical verses to new or imported shows." I can understand why the imported shows might need topical verses, but why the new? Surely they are as topical as it gets? Or if not, why is "new" of note, then?
 * A fair cop, guv. I'll change to "add topical verses to imported or long-running shows.  Tim riley  talk    18:45, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * And now done.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Psmith etc
 * "orotundity" Possibly a link to the definition
 * I'm not wedded to the word, and will comb the thesaurus for a synonym that doesn't need a link.  Tim riley  talk    18:45, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Now "formality". Not quite a bullseye, but it will do till we think of a better word.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Might "courtliness" be better?  Tim riley  talk    13:33, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * " two short stories to Cosmopolitan and Collier's for a total of $500, a much higher rate" Hm, does 2 for $500 establish a rate?
 * Redrawn.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * More anon.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:05, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * 1930s
 * "US Internal Revenue" We don't tend to refer to it as "Internal Revenue" in the way Brits talk of the "Inland Revenue". It would be IRS most of the time, but it would be spelled out as Internal Revenue Service.
 * Thank you, Wehwalt. It shall be amended.  Tim riley  talk    18:45, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Now done.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * " and, Donaldson comments, would have been overwhelmed" perhaps "suggests" for "comments"
 * Done.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Aftermath
 * It would be interesting to know what 1941 defenders of Wodehouse had to say. That seems to be given little space.  We have comments against him, and also the reader will likely "get" why it's a bad idea to broadcast over enemy radio in wartime. All the more reason to know how he was defended in a wartime Britain which didn't have much time for tolerance of such things.
 * Basically it was a matter of British fair play: not condemning a man before all the facts are known. SchroCat and I are in confab about a sentence or two to convey this.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * A little extra added along those lines. Does this add a little balance, do you think? - SchroCat (talk) 13:42, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * American exile
 * "Upper East Side district of Manhattan" I've rarely heard it called a district. Perhaps "Manhattan's Upper East Side"?
 * Here is an excellent example of the benefit of Peer Review! A touch on the tiller to point the vessel towards the idiomatic form. Duly changed.
 * Technique
 * "such as the Drones Club" as this is the sole mention of this venerable group, perhaps the reader could be told which set of works features it.
 * As an honorary American member, Wehwalt, your view carries complete conviction. It shall be done. A very pleasing task, too.  Tim riley  talk    20:41, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Now footnoted. I think that will suffice, but we could mention the whole lot earlier, along with first mentions of Bertie and Jeeves, Blandings etc. SchroCat, what think you?  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I moved (and then reverted it) to get a better view of it. On balance I think up with J&W, Blandings mention would possibly look better? (I'm open to either position and happy to leave it to you, or other voices from the ether). - SchroCat (talk) 13:50, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Reception
 * Waugh "opines" and Leavis "wrote". Both are dead (ditto Asquith, who is mentioned with Blair, who is not).  What is the rationale on tenses?
 * Gone for current throughout, except where a date is used as the anchor. - SchroCat (talk) 19:35, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The blocking of the knighthood ... it's separated from the information earlier about him getting his knighthood. Can the reader be given a hint there that it had been previously blocked?
 * Done. Does it read all right?  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * That's about it, really. Very well done.--Wehwalt (talk) 09:13, 10 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments from BB
The first half: apologies if I am listing points that others have already raised. This is a most enjoyable article and I am devastated that I was unable to participate in it.
 * Lead
 * The description of P.G. in the first line as "an English author" is a little dull. The Oxford Companion to Eng. Lit describes him as "the most widely-read humorist of his day" – something like that, I think, would kick the article off with more oomph.
 * Yes indeed. Done. I have slightly watered down the wording, as in the form you quote it would need a citation, and I hate citations in leads, with a Florentine fourteenth-century frenzy.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "After his release he made six broadcasts from German radio in Berlin..." If he was still in Germany, in what sense was he "released"?
 * I'm inclined to dig my heels in over this. We mention a few words earlier that his internment had ended, and surely no reader will suppose that this meant he was free to toddle down to Tegel Airport and hop on a plane to Croydon.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I don't like to take the accountancy approach, but the figures in the final paragraph are a bit confusing. If he took "up to two years to build a plot and write a scenario", and then three months to write the book, it's hard to see how he could write 90+ books between 1902 and 1974 – along with all his other projects. I imagine that the answer is that he worked on many projects simultaneously, but it might be worthwhile tweaking the prose to clarify this.
 * Done, I think. SchroCat, would you be so kind as to check you approve of my wording here?  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me! - SchroCat (talk) 14:02, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure that the writers' roll call is necessary in the lead
 * I'm biddable on this. SchroCat, I think you have the casting vote.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Deleted. When I wrote this I knew that either you or Tim would tut about it, but thought I'd chance my arm anyway... - SchroCat (talk) 14:05, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Early years
 * "Eleanor Wodehouse was also of ancient ancestry" – well, I'm sure we all are, aren't we?
 * Certainly. I myself can trace my ancestry back to a protoplasmal primordial atomic globule. But I take the point, and have added "aristocratic". (And of longer lineage than the Wodehouses, too, it seems, going back to the court of Edward the Confessor.)  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Did Bertie Wooster, in his recollection of a "penitentiary", actually name Malvern House? If so, I think this needs to be worked into the quotation.
 * This is a bit tricky, because Bertie sometimes calls it "Malvern House" and sometimes "St Asaph's, both under the frightful headmaster Aubrey Upjohn. I don't want to labour the point, and I'd rather leave it as it is.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Reluctant banker; budding writer 1900–08
 * When did he take up the Globe appointment? Presumably he held it initially alongside his banking job?
 * Indeed. Now clarified.
 * "and devoted himself to a career as a full-time author" – I might stick a "thereafter" or "from then on" before "devoted".
 * Now redrawn.
 * Surely "prentice" is archaic, acceptable within a quote but not otherwise?
 * Loud blinding and stiffing from this quarter. Changed to "apprentice", with conspicuously bad grace.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "In April 1904 Wodehouse sailed to New York.." It would be useful to include in this some indication of his motivation, e.g. "seeking to widen his range of experience".
 * Excellent point. He had been mad about America from his boyhood, and went there as soon as he had the money to do so. I've added something to make this point.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "launched a theatrical career" — "launched a theatrical writing career" – otherwise it sounds as though he became an actor.
 * Done.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Psmith, Blandings, Wooster, Jeeves and Broadway 1908–17
 * "It was published in hardback in the US and (under the title Something Fresh) the UK in the same year" – something about that formulation bothers me, I'm not sure what, but it doesn't read right.  An alternative arrangement might be: "That year it was published in hardback in the US, and in the UK under the title Something Fresh.
 * Redrawn.
 * "It was Wodehouse's first novel to be farcical" → "It was Wodehouse's first farcical novel"?
 * Yes, definitely. What can I have been thinking of?  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "the first story about Bertie and Jeeves" – is this really encyclopaedic? In the leader you refer to "Bertie Wooster" and Jeeves, and I would have thought that "Wooster and Jeeves" was the proper degree of formality.
 * I'm following the example of Usborne, Lady Donaldson, McCrum and French in referring to the character as "Bertie". It is true that Benny Green and Jasen tend to call him "Wooster", but I reckon the "Bertie" camp considerably outweighs the Woosterites.
 * 1920s
 * "He also worked on non-musical productions..." Can you briefly say what work he did on these productions, which presumably did not have lyrics?
 * Amended.  Tim riley  talk    14:59, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Hollywood: 1929–31
 * Rien
 * Best-seller 1930s
 * "... but at the last minute their version had to be almost entirely rewritten by others". I think some of what you have consigned to a note could usefully be incorporated into the text, especially the factor that th producer disliked the script and wanted to jettison it anyway.
 * Done, but I'm not sure about it. SchroCat, what think you?  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * That looks fine to me. - SchroCat (talk) 14:02, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * As Tim knows, I am an opponent of formulae that purport to give present-day equivalents of historical values, but I think that Wodehouse's £100,000 a year needs a 1930s context. With this in mind I have discovered, from a 1950s House of Commons debate that the average earnings in the manufacturing industries was £3.9s a week, or £180 a year. So P.G. was earning more than 500 times the average British industrial wage. Maybe worth a footnote.
 * Harold Macmillan, no less! It must be right then. I'll certainly footnote this.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I forgot to say that the £3.9s a week was what Harold said was the average industrial wage in 1935, but I think you will understand that, having read the Hansard extract. Brianboulton (talk) 14:33, 11 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "would have been overwhelmed" – is what I believe is the conditional perfect the righyt grammatical form to use here? If, foe example, I say that "my father would loved that", the implication is that my father wasn't around to experience what he would have loved. Yet here you are talking about something which Wodehouse actually experienced.
 * Redrawn.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

More to come. Brianboulton (talk) 21:01, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Really excellent stuff so far: many thanks. Looking forward to Round Two.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Echoing the thanks for the work so far: all grist to the m. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 14:02, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

Here's the rest:
 * Second World War, internment and broadcasts
 * What happened to Ethel when P.G. was sent to Loos? No further mention of her in this section.
 * She remained in Le Touquet - now clarified. - SchroCat (talk) 11:29, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "On 21 June 1941 ... Wodehouse received a visit from two members of the Gestapo. He was given ten minutes to pack his things before he was taken to the Hotel Adlon in Berlin. He was thus released..." Does being carted off to Germany at 10 minutes' notice really amount to "release"? Particularly as he was not allowed to leave the country.
 * Released from internment - now clarified. - SchroCat (talk) 08:52, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * The footnote "Sproat says that Wodehouse was "tricked" into making the broadcasts" seems unnecessary. In the main text you say "...Wodehouse was, in the words of Phelps, "cleverly trapped" into making five broadcasts...", which seems sufficient.
 * Expunged -SchroCat (talk) 08:52, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Aftermath – reactions and investigation
 * Was Connor's broadcast really a "bulletin" within the generally accepted meaning of the word?
 * I've gone for the contemporary description: a postscript to the news. - SchroCat (talk) 08:52, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "... but the Department of War used the interviews as an ideal representation of anti-Nazi propaganda". It rather defies logic how this could be so; what was the Department's reasoning?
 * Because Wodehouse managed to mock the Germans in the programmes, despite broadcasting from Berlin. Unfortunately Connolly gives no explanation (even of the reason I've just given) but just reports the fact and moves on. - SchroCat (talk) 11:29, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "The Wodehouses remained in Germany until September 1943..." – ah, so she was with him! This needs to be made clearer rather earlier in the narrative.
 * Done - I've added details of her arrival in Berlin. - SchroCat (talk) 11:29, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "On 9 September Wodehouse was visited by an MI5 investigator, Major Edward Cussen, a former barrister, who was to formally investigate him..." There's some awkward repetition there, which suggests a slight rewording is necessary.
 * Tweaked. - SchroCat (talk) 11:29, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * " which states that" → " which stated that"?
 * ...and here:
 * Technicaly the report still exists, so it still states it. Happy to alter the tense if you think it better - just let me know. - SchroCat (talk) 08:52, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Give date for the egregious Cooper's appointment as ambassador.
 * Done - SchroCat (talk) 12:02, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "They were subsequently arrested and placed under preventive detention". Who arrested them, and on what grounds? I understand, reading on, that it was the French authorities, but there's no indication given as to why they acted.
 * The French arrested them on the grounds of a dinner party conversation...! No charges were ever bought (Wodehouse having committed no crime on French, German, British or American soil) - SchroCat (talk) 12:02, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "...but it was not until June 1946 that all charges against him were officially dropped". What were the charges?
 * Tweaked to show that he wasn't going to face any - SchroCat (talk) 12:02, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * American exile, 1946–75
 * What was the location of the off-Broadway revival of Leave It to Jane?
 * It was at the Sheridan Square Playhouse. You don't think we ought to name it, do you? We have generally only named theatres (Aldwych, Princess) when they bear on the narrative directly.  Tim riley  talk    08:24, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * (aside) Ethel must have been barmy, coming to England in 1948 to shop!! There was little to be had, whatever there was was on ration and the place was a right dump. Or so my elders and betters tell me.
 * Benny Green should be pipelinked
 * Done.  Tim riley  talk    08:24, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Robert McCrum is linked in  a footnote but not in the main text. And we should be told in the text who he is (and Green, too, for that matter)
 * McCrum was introduced and linked earlier, in the Early years section. Green now attended to.  Tim riley  talk    08:24, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "He was considered for the award of a knighthood at least three times from 1967..." Can you say by whom he was considered, and who the "British officials" were that blocked the award? Wilson, who was PM in 1967, had the powers to overrule them, but obviously didn't. (Later: I see the matter is dealt with in more detail in the Reception and Reputation section. It doesn't really fit there. My preference would be to bring it all into here; readers would then get the whole story in one go, rather than half here and half later.)
 * , The second block was under the Heath government (I have a dim memory of reading in Private Eye that Reginald Maudling blocked the honour, but Lord Cromer will suffice). How about this: give the dates and the culprits in the American exile section, but keep the reason why the ambassadors were against it for the reputation section? As to who recommended him for an honour on any of the three occasions, I don't think we know. Anyone can recommend anyone else for the honours list. We might find the records in the Public Record Office at Kew, but I don't think I've seen them in print. Tim riley  talk    08:24, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I agree with moving the detail northward on the page, leaving the Ambassador's comments where they are. I'll have a hunt rund for any relevant further details. I seem to remember that he was recomended by smeone in Liverpool, (possibly trade unionist), although I'd have to dig round a bit more to seejust how faulty my memory is! - SchroCat (talk) 08:58, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * My memory less faulty than I thought as I found one of the refeences straight away (It's the one we use there already from The Daily Telegraph, who say "... in 1967 Wodehouse was put up for an honour by Walter Citrine, once Mersey district secretary of the Electrical Trades Union, given a peerage after serving as TUC general secretary" - SchroCat (talk)09:06, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Citrine knew a thing or two about good writing. His ABC of Chairmanship is masterly, and taught me much about committee work in my young days.  Tim riley  talk    09:16, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Technique and approach
 * " In his younger years, would write around two to three thousand words a day..." Word missing?
 * I think the lead tweak that I asked for also needs to be worked in here (about working on several projects simultaneously)
 * "The literary critic Edward L. Galligan also considers that Wodehouse's stories adopt the form of the American musical comedy for literature, and sees that Wodehouse's work within those constraints shows his mastery of the form." I'd like to shorten this if possible; it meanders somewhat untidly at present. Suggestion: "The literary critic Edward L. Galligan considers that Wodehouse's stories show his mastery in adapting the form of the American musical comedy for his writings".
 * "correctly" is followed too quickly by "correcting"
 * All four points address, hopefully adequately. -


 * Language
 * First paragraph: "Wodehouse would also create new words by splitting others in two" → "Wodehouse created new words..." etc. Also I'd try and avoid the close proximity of "splitting" and "splits"
 * Both done - SchroCat (talk) 12:05, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Second paragraph: the first sentence definitely needs to be split. At present it goes on and on. And on. Also, I thing "prize-giving" needs a hyphen.
 * Split and hyphenated, respectively - SchroCat (talk) 12:05, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * I can't easily grasp the context of the conversational extract, the main purpose of which is to display Wodehouse's hobbing and nobbing joke. This could, I suggest, be achieved by  using just the last three lines.
 * Sorry, I'm being a bit dense: could you elaborate on this? Do you mean so something with the "To offer a housemaid a cigarette is not hobbing. Nor, when you light it for her, does that constitute nobbing." bit? (The "last three lines" changes depending on screen size, so I'm not sure what you're looking at. - SchroCat (talk) 12:05, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Apologies: my notes got completely mixed up here. Forget the hobbing and nobbing, that is perfectly OK. I was referring to the conversational extract that begins "it seems to me..." What I meant to say is that the purpose of the extract is to demonstrate Wodehouse's ability to make something interesting out of a cliché, in this case "the mind boggles". I thought that this could be achieved by just using the last three lines of the conversation. But having mucked things up pretty comprehensively, I'm inclined to leave well alone, now. What was the other point you wished me to pronounce on? Brianboulton (talk) 13:11, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I've tagged the two comments below - many thanks - SchroCat (talk) 13:15, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * No doubt it's my tired brain, but I can't find the pun in "a pinched look". Can you help?
 * Pinched as in "arrested"  Tim riley  talk    08:32, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Reception and reputation
 * "the influential literary critic" Puffery per WP:WEASEL
 * De-influenced. - SchroCat (talk) 12:10, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Why is Michael Davie's observation in the past tense, and the Times obituarist's in the present?
 * Here...:
 * I've put Davie in the present tense, but the sentence now reads "After his death six weeks later, ... Davie, ... observes that...": Are you OK with that? - SchroCat (talk) 12:08, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Well, I'm not, and I have (negotiably as ever, of course) put a couple of writes/wrote into the past tense where the present is jarring. I think it's more important to be readable than consistent, if the two collide.  Tim riley  talk    14:35, 12 June 2015 (UTC)

Overall, a real pleasure to review, and a real regret that I'm not part of the writing team. Instead I've got Jeremy Thorpe. Brianboulton (talk) 21:03, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I have a slight problem with "1,750 quotations from Wodehouse in the OED". I suspect that there are very largely words devised by Wodehouse, rather than quotations from his prose, which is what "quotations" suggests. The Oxford Dictionary of Quotations has 17 entries for PG (including the one about the Black Shorts leader Roderick Spode, who has "the sort of eye that can open an oyster at sixty paces". Wish I'd thought of that.
 * It's quite the opposite. There aren't all that many words actually invented by Wodehouse (as opposed to popularised by him). A familiar Wodehouse word like "rannygazoo" turns out to be "US regional and colloquial" from the 1890s, and a "hornswoggling highbinder" has one part dating from 1829 and the other from 1806. In the main, the OED quotes quite ordinary sentences from the novels to illustrate the use of all sorts of words, from Aberdonian, adj. and n … 1931 P. G. Wodehouse Big Money iii. 53 "Her idea of expense-money is little short of Aberdonian" all the way to zowie, int … 1972  P. G. Wodehouse Pearls, Girls, & Monty Bodkin xi. 171   "He gets out and zowie a gang of thugs come jumping out of the bushes, and next thing you know they're off with your jewel case." The statement about the 1,750 quotations is from McCrum, here –   Tim riley  talk    08:32, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Brian, many thanks, as always, for your throughts and comments. There are a couple up there that could just do with an affirmation that we've followed the right line, or asked for clarification, but the rest should all be done and dusted. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 12:10, 12 June 2015 (UTC)

Thoughts from the Holy Land
Looks very well done from first glance. Will have a look through and note any thoughts. (I haven't looked through the above comments yet, so please excuse me if any of these are repetitions.) Most places I've just copy-edited directly, feel free to revert anything you don't like.

I found very little to quibble about. A fine effort indeed—one that I very much enjoyed and look forward to seeing at FAC anon. —  Cliftonian   (talk)  01:39, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Do we know the date of the baptism, perchance?
 * Alas, no.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * OK —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The wording of the second footnote could lead readers to think Richard's surname was for some reason Deane
 * I thought that when I was typing it, but I couldn't and still can't think how to clarify this without making a production number of it. We can't just call him "Richard", because we mention the "Lancelot" elsewhere in the article, and it would be odd to omit just one of this three given names.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * You can just give his surname as well; it's clear from context who the Wodehouse referred to afterwards is. —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Excellent. Why didn't I think of that? (don't answer). I see someone is ahead of me and has kindly done the deed - thank you, sir or madam.  Tim riley  talk    16:38, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * No problem at all sir. —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:41, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "Wodehouse came to love Ethel's daughter Leonora (1905–1944) and legally adopted her." when? the wording "came to love" seems to imply that this was some time after he married her mother.
 * Wodehouse didn't meet Leonora (who was at school in England) until several months after the marriage. She and Wodehouse hit it off well from the start, but it was not until she was about fifteen that they became devoted to each other. I'm afraid I can't find out when PGW formally adopted her. If any of the sources give the date, I've missed it.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * OK —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Note 18 made me chuckle.
 * The suggestion provoked an outburst of donnish humour, with someone writing in from Oxford that Jeeves should be denied the degree for having told Bertie that the line "Tired nature's sweet restorer" is by Shakespeare. (I had to look it up: it's by one Edward Young, of whom my ignorance is pristine and flawless.)  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * But surely you knew he was one of the ringleaders of the Bounty mutiny? —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "Wodehouse had to report to the authorities daily" which authorities? Wehrmacht? SS? something else?
 * I think this and the next ball will be taken by the batsman at the Pavilion end.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Unknown, I'm afraid. The sources either say "German authorities" or Kommandatur. - SchroCat (talk) 14:17, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * OK —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "After two months of occupation the Germans interned all foreign males under 60" Foreign meaning non-French, presumably?
 * "Enemy aliens" or "enemy nationals": now added - SchroCat (talk) 14:17, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * OK great —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Hearty thanks for your attention, Cliftonian. Some excellent points there.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Many thanks - I'll pick up on the two points on the Germans/French etc shortly. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 14:02, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the expeditious responses chaps. —  Cliftonian   (talk)  16:27, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Ssilvers
I am going through slowly. I notice that there is some very English idiomatic writing that would not be clear to readers elsewhere, and I have added some hidden comments/questions and attempted to translate to an international standard in a few cases. Feel free to modify, but note that where I have made a change it was likely because I found the phrase obscure, so please consider alternate wording. It may be that some contributors have tried to emulate Wodehouse's style, but we must emphasize clarity over charm. -- Ssilvers (talk) 03:39, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Good grief! Emulate Wodehouse's style? We'd be struck by lightning. He is impossible to imitate successfully. Sebastian Faulks managed a beta plus with Jeeves and the Wedding Bells in 2013, but I think I speak for both nominators of this PR that we have sedulously avoided deliberately attempting Wodehousean style in our prose. I'm going to revert "asthma", as the sources all say just "a weak chest" (Green, p. 9, Donaldson, p. 43, McCrum, p. 22, Jasen p. 8 - never knew such unanimity on a diagnosis in all my life) but as to your other changes, for my part I'm thoroughly content, and if SchroCat concurs I suggest we adopt them. Thank you for your very careful attention.  Tim riley  talk    13:28, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I do! Many thanks for your thoughts: all much appreciated. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 14:02, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * You're very welcome. I will continue section by section.  "Weak chest" is not a diagnosis that should be stated in an encyclopedia. In this case, I really must ask you to try again to translate that into something less vague, or else merely say that his doctors recommended the move "for health reasons". -- Ssilvers (talk) 16:08, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The problem is that four of the main sources—Green, Jansen, Connolly and McCrum—specifically describe it as a "weak chest". Neither they, nor any of the other sources I've gone through, speculate as to what that may have been, or provide any further detail. I suspect it may have either been the diagnosis of a Victorian doctor, or the description later given by PGW. - SchroCat (talk) 16:25, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * We could perhaps meet Ss's concern by making it "was diagnosed with what was described as 'a weak chest'".  Tim riley  talk    16:43, 11 June 2015 (UTC) Or "an unspecified respiratory complaint".   Tim riley  talk    16:44, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The first one works, I think, as a footnote. I just added one that needs the page numbers seen by Schrocat. How's that? -- Ssilvers (talk) 16:47, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I've added more along Tim's line than anything. I don't think we need to say it one way in the text and repeat it in a footnote, so I've added the words in a quote, showing Wodehouse was the origin of the term. I hope this suits. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 20:10, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

Certainly suits me. Seems a perfect compromise. Thank you, SchroCat.  Tim riley  talk    20:18, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, that's OK, although I'd rather remove "according to Wodehouse" from the text, and put him into the ref: "Wodehouse, quoted in Jasen...." Jasen does not specify when or where Wodehouse said so? -- Ssilvers (talk) 20:32, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Done and done! Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 12:11, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Infobox: Do you need the pen names to be in the infobox? I'd suggest shortening it by deleting them. -- Ssilvers (talk) 20:36, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * As you know, Ss, I think I-Bs for arts biogs are a waste of space, but having inherited this one, it seems to me that the pen names are the only justification for keeping the thing at all. Without the pen-names the box would be pretty much a useless rehash of the lead. My vote would be to keep the I-B with the pen names or blitz the thing altogether.  Tim riley  talk    21:02, 11 June 2015 (UTC)
 * If I get a vote, then, I vote to remove the IB, but keep the signature somehow. -- Ssilvers (talk) 04:44, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * That seems a reasonable proposition. Keeping the signature and glueing it to the lead picture would present no problem. As to the pen-names, if we remove the info-box ought we to mention them all somewhere in the main text instead? PGW didn't write anything of consequence under them, and I incline to the view that their relevance verges on trivia., (and anyone else, natch), your thoughts, s.t.p.?  –    Tim riley  talk    15:38, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Then perhaps mention them in a footnote to a statement like, "Wodehouse generally wrote under his own name, but during [late/early in] his career he used various pen names for _____ sorts of works, [none of which are considered to be of consequence - if you have a cite for that proposition]." In the footnote, if possible, mention which names were used for novels, plays, poetry, journalism, etc.? -- Ssilvers (talk) 15:51, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm ambivalent on this one. We seem to be going the long way round on the issue. Still, if there is a consensus and someone removes it, I wouldn't be sad to see it go. – SchroCat (talk) 16:47, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Oh! I'm mildly surprised. Well, I suggest we leave the I-B as it is for now.  Tim riley  talk    17:02, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Exile in America. Isn't it a bit over-dramatic to use the word "exile" in the heading? Apparently, Wodehouse settled happily in Remsenburg/Southampton.  It wasn't literally an exile -- if he had returned to Britain, it seems that he would have very likely been cleared of any remaining accusations.  How about: Three decades in America: 1946–75. -- Ssilvers (talk) 22:04, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Dr. Blofeld
Will review tomorrow.♦ Dr. Blofeld  20:59, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Looking forward to it, but no rush whatever, dear Doc.  Tim riley  talk    21:05, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Lede
 * Do we need to link magistrate?
 * Quite happy to unlink. I often think we all tend to link rather too much.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Have unlinked in the main text as well.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "had happy teenage years " -can we be a bit more sophisticated with how we word this?
 * Looks all right to me, but happy to contemplate an alternative suggestion.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "he wrote a series of Broadway musical comedies that were an important part of the development of the American musical." -if so important perhaps mention a few of the most notable ones?
 * Yes, but not in the lead, I think.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Pipe MGM to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer to avoid a redirect.
 * Done - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "Some critics of Wodehouse have considered his work flippant, but among his fans are former British prime ministers, and many of his fellow writers." -some examples might be good here for comprehension's sake, I understand though if they're too numerous to mention.
 * There was a longish list of eight heavy hitters in there which was removed at a previous request. The list was Max Beerbohm, Rudyard Kipling, A.E. Housman, Evelyn Waugh, George Orwell, Bernard Levin, Compton Mackenzie and Hilaire Belloc, so it's difficult to pull out one or two by way of example, asthey are all big names. - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I agree it's all or nothing with that impressive roster. We've only had one request to remove it. If any later reviewers agree with the Doctor we can easily put the list back again.  Tim riley  talk    13:46, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I think it was a good idea to remove it from the Lead. -- Ssilvers (talk) 21:58, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Early years
 * Delink Hong Kong
 * Done - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Perhaps a photo of St Nicolas' Church, Guildford where he was baptised would look attractive here?
 * It would certainly break up slab of text, which is usually desirable.   Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Done.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Rep of "happiest". I know they're not too close together but some variation would be good.
 * I can find only one "happiest".  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Broadway
 * "The show was successful, but they thought the song lyrics weak" -sorry, who thought it weak?
 * Bolton and Kern, who invited PGW to work with them, as we say.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "In these musicals Wodehouse's lyrics won high praise from critics as well as fellow lyricists such as Ira Gershwin.[69]" -any quotes from critics worth adding to elaborate a little?
 * There's a quite famous one in rhyme (by Dorothy Parker, I think), but I'm a little reluctant to inflate the section.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "In the Grove Dictionary of American Music Larry Stempel writes, "By presenting naturalistic stories and characters and attempting to integrate the songs and lyrics into the action of the libretto, these works brought a new level of intimacy, cohesion, and sophistication to American musical comedy."[73] The theatre writer Gerald Bordman calls Wodehouse "the most observant, literate, and witty lyricist of his day".[74] The composer Richard Rodgers wrote, "Before Larry Hart, only P. G. Wodehouse had made any real assault on the intelligence of the song-listening public."[75]" Mmm, a lot of this looks like it belongs in a style/legacy section further down than in the biography. I'd have expected his impact on the American musical to be discussed in detail further down but just mentioned briefly further up.
 * You could argue it either way, I think. We put it here, because PGW's legacy on the musical stage has faded to some extent, but he made a big impact at the time.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

Is there really nothing else worth mentioning? Something more about his life in Hollywood I'd find interesting. You mentioned Ethel loved the social aspects of it. Highly interested in Hollywood during that period I guess I'd like to know a little more about his involvement in Hollywood and what he did while there. Perhaps could find something interesting in the old newspapers.
 * Hollywood and 1930s
 * Just getting started with this. The Film Daily page 3 17 September 1937. Wodehouse was again signed to a contract to write for films; this time it was with Warner Bros. (see page on right).  The photo of him shows his being awarded the International Mark Twain Society gold medal as the greatest contemporary author of fictional humor. This was a daily trade paper published by Wid's Film and Film Folk (NY). If anyone wants the photo, a quick check of copyright renewals should find the paper is PD. We hope (talk) 13:37, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The New Movie Magazine December 1930, page 30. Gossip of the Studios. Tower Publishing.  Wodehouse, his wife and stepdaughter were very popular with the Hollywood set. We hope (talk) 14:06, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Variety 16 May 1919 front page-Wodehouse and Bolton dissolve their writing partnership. We hope (talk) 14:11, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Silver Screen Magazine page 72-October 1935. Hollywood-the Writers' Heaven by Ruth Rankin. Wodehouse told MGM he was only able to work outdoors.  This was where he thought about his novel work--while working in his garden at home. The studio set him up on an out of the way Western set on the lot.  When Wodehouse went to lunch, a prop man who was unaware of the arrangement, removed his table, typewriter and chair.  When Wodehouse returned from lunch, his outdoor office was gone. Wodehouse felt it wasn't worth the effort to try getting the equipment back and decided to work from home during his tenure there. We hope (talk) 14:57, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * This is all excellent stuff, which would be marvellous in a full-length book, but is perhaps a bit too detailed for an encyclopedia article of a few thousand words. (I loved the last one - so typically Wodehousean.)  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Pipe Manchester Guardian to The Guardian. We really ought to have an article on the pre 1958 The Manchester Guardian by now though, I asked a while back to create one.
 * The Manchester Guardian is now up an running, please consider linking directly to it from your other articles citing the pre 1959 Guardian!♦ Dr. Blofeld  11:13, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Is it needed? The change in name was all there was (they had moved their main office down from Machester 6 years previously, if memory serves), so it's just the name that changed, nothing more substntial? - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Le Tourqet, in the Pas-de-Calais department of northern France. -my immediate thought was southern France..
 * Tweaked to add "northern France" - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "His other books from the decade include Right Ho, Jeeves, which Donaldson judged his best work, Uncle Fred in the Springtime, which the writer Bernard Levin considered the best, and Blandings Castle, which contains "Lord Emsworth and the Girl Friend", which Rudyard Kipling thought "one of the most perfect short stories I have ever read".[17] Other leading literary figures who admired Wodehouse were A. E. Housman, Max Beerbohm and Hilaire Belloc;[17] on the radio and in print Belloc called Wodehouse "the best writer of our time: the best living writer of English ... the head of my profession".[106] Wodehouse regarded Belloc's plaudit as "a gag, to get a rise out of serious-minded authors whom he disliked".[107][n 19] " -I find this a bit difficult to read with some of the punctuation and repetition of "best", even if in quotes. Is there any chance you could restructure/paraphrase a bit here?
 * I've split this longish para in two.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * WWII and Aftermath
 * No need to link "interned", unless it is a link to an article like Imprisonment in German-occupied France or something.
 * I think there will be some readers who don't know what internment is. Happy to be pushed aside if the consensus is against me -, your thoughts? - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * As I say above, I like to be sparing with blue links, finding too much blue hard on the reader's eye, but the OED gives four other very different meanings of the verb "intern", and I think we should err on the side of caution here.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Swiss embassy in Berlin and British ambassador to France, -links?
 * The search facility is up t'spout at the mo., but I'll have a look again shortly - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * There's no page for the Swiss embassy, and the British ambassador page is a list only, which doesn't illuminate! - SchroCat (talk) 18:34, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Isn't it formally "Hôtel Le Bristol"?
 * Ditto - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Now done. – SchroCat (talk) 18:34, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "Wodehouse worked on his novel Uncle Dynamite" -(1948) or later published in 1948?
 * I think, and indeed hope, all our bracketed dates for books are publication dates. With PGW's method of drafting over long periods, and also for having different publication dates in the US and the UK, the first publication date is the only consistent way to go.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * American exile
 * "Ethel secured a comfortable penthouse apartment in Manhattan's Upper East Side," -do we know the street? The address if known might be interesting to NY enthusiasts like myself in a footnote perhaps.
 * I have a dim memory that they had two different flats there, before finally moving to Long Island. I imagine it's in one of the books. I'll check, and add it if I find it.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "An off-Broadway revival of the 1917 Bolton-Wodehouse-Kern Leave It to Jane was a surprise hit, running for 928 performances, but his few post-war stage works, some in collaboration with Bolton, made little impression.[1" -928 performances is very remarkable, I'd expect some more detail on it here and some critical commentary.
 * Wodehouse was taken to see it, but he didn't have anthing else to do with the revival, and the sources don't comment on this production.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

♦ Dr. Blofeld  10:00, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Writing
 * not sure on the use of linking Edwardian in the slang context, but I think we ought to have an article on Edwardian slang. Perhaps would be interested in creating an article on it?

Thoroughly enjoyable read, thankyou.♦ Dr. Blofeld  10:24, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Reception
 * " "was one of the most successful in the history of musical comedy"." -according to whom?
 * You mean add an inline citation? I'd go with that, if SchroCat concurs.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Many thanks Doc. I've addressed a couple, but the searc facility is playing up at the moment, so I can't do a couple of the wikilinks requeted: I'll deal iwth shortly, adn between us, TR and myself will cover all these points one way or another. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 08:09, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Let me add my thanks, Doctor. This is shaping up to be a really strong PR with your, and earlier, excellent comments.  Tim riley  talk    13:42, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

Comment from CorinneSD

 * I had added a no-break space between first initials of names, and I see those edits have been reverted. According to MOS:SPACEINITS, the period after initials should be followed by a no-break space. Also, all article titles containing first initials have a space following each period, so I think the same style should be followed for names in articles. If there is an exception to this rule that is being followed, I'd be interested to learn of it. CorinneSD (talk) 15:49, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi CorinneSD, I was following BrEng practice of avoiding the "initial-full stop-space-initial-full stop-space-surname" format, which makes most good British writers wince. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 15:54, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The MoS guidance on intials is as remote from reality as its invariably ignored guidance that we don't put blue links from quotations.  Tim riley  talk    16:11, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Oh no. The final proof. I always put spaces after stops. Dudley Miles (talk) 16:18, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * In an ideal world I wouldn't have the full stops in there: they dropped out of common use a few decades ago! – SchroCat (talk) 16:21, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * They were dropped by Her Majesty's Government in official documents as long ago as the late 1960s. I had to unlearn what I had been taught by old schoolmasters when I joined the civil service.  Tim riley  talk    16:48, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * It's not as much of an issue for Americans since few writers here use only their first initials. I wonder if this spacing issue is an AmerEng/BrEng difference. CorinneSD (talk) 16:56, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I believe for names such as P. J. O'Rourke full stops and spaces are still generally used in AmEng. Over here I see SchroCat and I are actually lagging behind modern British usage: the BBC and The Guardian drop the full stops and the spaces: "PG Wodehouse": here and here. I'm old fashioned enough to prefer spaces, but we must move with the times, I suppose.  Tim riley  talk    17:04, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I personally use "JP Asher" on social media and the like, and "J P Asher" in more formal settings. For what it's worth. —  Cliftonian   (talk)  17:11, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * So you don't even use periods after initials? Wow. I think we should continue to use periods and spaces after initials since they represent separate names. I think modern media cut spaces, punctuation, even words, whenever they can because they've realized that the more that is printed, or written, the more ink and paper is used (for newspapers, magazines and books), and the more time that is spent on typesetting/keyboarding means paying typesetters/typists/keyboarders more, so time is money. I think whatever style is used by publishers of books and academic journals should be used. CorinneSD (talk) 17:24, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * The current form is one used by some journals etc: the Oxford English Dictionary use the version we have (which I presume means this will follow the OUP style guide). – SchroCat (talk) 17:47, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I assume that you mean the formatting of Wodehouse's name (with no space after "P.") in the title of the article in the OED because I don't see any other names with initials in the article. But isn't that different from the formatting of most WP article titles containing two initials? The ones I've seen all have a space after the first initial + period/full stop. CorinneSD (talk) 17:59, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

I think we're probably happier with no space between the two—it's more common in the UK than the American over-use of full stops and spaces. – SchroCat (talk) 18:02, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Well, "over-use" is a subjective term. Shall we leave out vowels, too? CorinneSD (talk) 19:18, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * No, we will retain British formatting for this British subject. I have no idea what vowels have to do with it, or why you suggest what you do? Just because you are unfamiliar with the differences between British and American formats on this doesn't mean that we ignore a common British usage. - SchroCat (talk) 19:23, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

Closing review
Warmest thanks from SchroCat and self to everyone who contributed to this review. We are taking the article to FAC, where all will be most warmly welcomed.  Tim riley  talk    21:57, 15 June 2015 (UTC)