Wikipedia:Peer review/Paramylodon/archive2

Paramylodon


I've listed this article for peer review per the reasons stated in the previous one.

Thanks, Magnatyrannus (talk &#124; contribs) 22:47, 5 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments by Z1720
Some comments after a quick skim:


 * "Detailed morphological analyses published as early as 2009 by Robert K. McAfee also suggest that Paramylodon and Glossotherium are very closely related and share a common ancestor." Needs a citation
 * First two parargaphs in "Description" need a citation at the end.
 * The paragraphs in "Skull and dentition characteristics" Are quite long. Any possibility of splitting them up?
 * "These two species have since been uncovered at the Fairmead Landfill Site and Irvington Site in California." Needs a citation
 * "The elongated symphysis of the mandible projects well beyond the nasal region. Since there is no ossification of the nasal septum as in Mylodon, a vigorous cartilage development must be assumed here. In addition, the tongue may also have had a supporting function during feeding. Due to the position of the hyoid bone, which was displaced far back in the skull, and its robust construction with strong muscle attachments, the geniohyoideus muscle, for example, was particularly strong and long, so that a very mobile tongue can be assumed." Needs a citation
 * Sources section is not needed because they are already stated in the references, so this is redundant.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 00:28, 7 October 2022 (UTC)


 * @Z1720 ✅ most of them except for the fourth one, which I don't know where it is. Magnatyrannus (talk &#124; contribs) 02:35, 7 October 2022 (UTC)


 * That fourth bullet point has now been cited. I will note that the diet section paragraph is very long now, and I suggest that it is split up. Z1720 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
 * @Z1720, also ✅. Magnatyrannus (talk &#124; contribs) 01:04, 10 October 2022 (UTC)