Wikipedia:Peer review/Parliament of Australia/archive1

Parliament of Australia
I've listed this article for peer review because I have made substantial edits and expansions to this page over the last few months and I would like some feedback on how the article is going and how it can be even better!

Thanks, Superegz (talk) 08:34, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

Comments from J947
I'll review this.  J 947 (c)  02:05, 21 April 2017 (UTC)


 * Lead


 * There should be no citations in the lead as per WP:CITELEAD.


 * Infobox


 * I've removed a few spaces.


 * It is very long. You should shorten it by at least a third.


 * First paragraph


 * I've added the serial comma and removed a space.


 * WP:OVERLINK should be followed for the 'Australia' link.


 * This sentence: The combination of two elected Houses, in which the members of the Senate represent the six States and the two self-governing Territories while the members of the House represent electoral divisions according to population, is modelled on the United States Congress., is rather long and should be split up.


 * Second paragraph


 * The upper house, the Senate, consists of 76 members:, should use emdashes instead of commas surrounding 'the senate'.


 * History


 * The Commonwealth of Australia came into being on 1 January 1901. Any reason why? It just seems too much of a coincidence...


 * After the official opening, from 1901 to 1927,. An emdash should be used.


 * Old Parliament House


 * There shouldn't be links in headings.


 * First paragraph


 * Again, emdashes.


 * And, again. :)


 * Second paragraph


 * was commenced on 28 August 1923[12] and completed in early 1927. Comma.

Ping for you.  J 947 (c)  19:26, 25 April 2017 (UTC)

Thanks, I will have a look at this later when I am free. Superegz (talk) 23:47, 25 April 2017 (UTC)