Wikipedia:Peer review/Peter Canavan/archive1

Peter Canavan
This is about Irish Gaelic Sports Player, Peter Canavan. I would like a review of the whole article to see what can be improved.


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 21:00, 10 January 2007 (UTC)

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question. You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, SenatorsTalk 00:35, 11 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
 * See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.[?]
 * Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
 * Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “ All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
 * Avoid using contractions like: didn't, didn't, didn't, didn't, wouldn't.
 * As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2][?]
 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]
 * I have fixed the article so that it satisfies the automated reviews, but some human input would be much more useful I think.--Macca7174 17:28, 15 January 2007 (UTC)
 * I'm going to remove this from peer review now. I don't know how to archive the suggestions, but I will save them in Talk:Peter Canavan, and get a more experienced user to do this properly.--Macca7174 20:12, 21 January 2007 (UTC)