Wikipedia:Peer review/Pleiades (star cluster)/archive1

Pleiades
I've worked on this article on and off since I found it with a cleanup tag on many months ago. Just looking for opinions on what more is needed to get it ready for an eventual FAC nomination. Worldtraveller 17:52, 30 September 2005 (UTC)

OK - here we go World! (I'm not reviewing for content, just structure) Thank care! Ryan Norton T 18:45, 30 September 2005 (UTC)
 * 1) Grammer of caption in opening image needs a bit of work
 * 2) "History" - one paragraph is too short
 * 3) "Composition" - second paragraph is too short
 * 4) "Age and future evolution" - third paragraph is too short (hmmm...!)
 * 5) "Reflection nebulosity" - all paragraphs too short
 * 6) "Names and technical information" - all paragraphs too short. One sentence paragraph. "Type" needs a legend. "Pronounciation guide" is funky and should probably be a legend too.
 * 7) "The Pleiades in folklore" - no need for a list here. One sentence paragraphs. Paragraphs too short.
 * 8) "References" - footnotes should be kept in a seperate section!
 * 9) "External links" - could use better descriptions


 * What's wrong with the grammar of the opening caption? Paragraphing is definitely a problem, but it's on track for FA nomination. Tony 05:18, 1 October 2005 (UTC)

Well, it may need a bit of work. It just doesn't sit right with me for some reason. I don't know, that seems closer to me. I could be wrong, though. Ryan Norton T 05:25, 1 October 2005 (UTC)
 * I.E. "The Pleiades, dominated by hot blue stars surrounded by reflection nebulosity"
 * The Pleiades, dominated by hot blue stars and surrounded by reflection nebulosity
 * The Pleiades, dominated by hot blue stars that are surrounded by reflection nebulosity

Thanks for the comments! I have adjusted the first image caption, expanded a few paras and rearranged a few bits. Mythology bit is prose instead of list now. As for references/footnotes, they're now all references with appropriate citation points in the text. Have tried to give links better descriptions.

Not quite sure what you mean by 'should be a legend' for the pronunciation guide, but in any case they really need to be given in IPA format, but I don't know how to do that. Anyone else? Worldtraveller 15:27, 5 October 2005 (UTC)


 * It's a very good article but a little crowded somehow. I enjoyed the inclusion of all the images but somehow it seems a bit to move through at times. Including the aspects of world folklore about the Pleiades is a wonderful touch though. Overall, I really like this article.--Mike 01:33, 16 October 2005 (UTC)