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Pokémon Red and Blue
This peer review discussion has been closed. I am trying to get this article to featured status, so I am requesting a peer review to try and iron out most of the obvious issue. Any comments, suggestions, and help would be greatly appreciated. Thanks, Artichoker [ talk ]  23:26, 18 September 2008 (UTC) Comments from SriMesh | talk  04:15, 21 September 2008 (UTC)
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.
 * handheld--> hand held or provide wikilink for term or an inline citation as it is not a dictionary word.
 * provide wikilink Multiplayer video game for multiplayer
 * Is run-throughs a word?  Perhaps sentence could be re-worded.
 * Run-throughs is used in a quote, so I can't change it or wiki-link it.


 * The very fist time IGN is mentioned it should be spelled out...Imagine Games Network (IGN) wikilinked and then parenthesized so folks no what the heck an IGN actually is.
 * IGN is already wiki-linked, and is also the title of the Wikipedia article. And as far as I know, no other video games spell out the company.

.. there should be an inline citation to a Pokemoniversary source.
 * As there is no wikilink for the made up non dictionary term...Pokemoniversary
 * Pokémoniversary is already cited at the end of the full quote by George Harrison (cite number 32.)


 * good job for using Non-free use media rationale for Pokémon Red and Blue on the image pages for this article.
 * good job separating out sub articles so this article is not too long.

Kind Regards and good luck
 * I have addressed the rest of your concerns. Thank you, Artichoker [ talk ]  15:25, 21 September 2008 (UTC)