Wikipedia:Peer review/Prayer/archive1

Prayer
I've listed this article for peer review because I feel the shortcomings that were pointed out during a "Good Article" nomination review last year have now been corrected.

Thanks,

Blanchardb 12:57, 22 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 02:29, 23 October 2007 (UTC)

User:BirgitteSB

 * Lead Way to short. See WP:LEAD. Orisons should be bold synom here.
 * Forms of prayer Aviod phrases like "The great spiritual traditions", that is an inappropriate tone for an encyclopedia. Bullet points need to be converted to prose.  Also avoid weseal words like "Some anthropologists believe . . ."
 * The act of prayer No references. Lots of weseal words.
 * Prayer in Abrahamic religions The various subsections here should be summaries of the main article. For example look at Prayer in Christianity: main topics are The Early Church; Liturgical; Vocal; Meditative; Prayer of recollection; Contemplative prayer; Physical posture; Charismatic prayer: Speaking in tongues; A Christian philosophy of prayer; Christian Science Prayer; and Epistemological issues.  Less than half of these topics are summarized.  Your summary of Christian prayer in this article should only need small additions and tweaking to be the lead over at Prayer in Christianity. The same issue needs looking into throughout this section.  No references for this section.
 * How is neopaganism an Abrahamic religion
 * Prayer in Eastern religions Same issues as last section. Also I am noticing the lack of animist traditions. Having only an Eastern section and a Abrahmic section means other traditions are left out.
 * Approaches to prayer Needs more references.
 * Experimental evaluation of efficacy of prayer This is slighty out of context without an introduction to the whole idea of Prayer healing.  BTW Prayer healing is a redirect to this article and probably should be addressed directly and bolded.
 * Historical polytheistic prayer This is the first the first mention of scrafice related to prayer. Despite the earlier section of "Prayer in the Bible"  The whole section seem out of place.  Why leave out the Aztecs or the Vikings?  And what about non-historical polytheistic prayer? No references
 * Etymology I would think this section would be first rather than last. No references
 * Misc  For some reason Prayer Warrior and Prayer group redirect here they should probably go to Prayer in Christianity but they are not really dealt with there either.-- Birgitte  SB  15:40, 25 October 2007 (UTC)

The article has little on Japan. I've listed some topics related to Japan on the article's talk page. Fg2 11:35, 7 November 2007 (UTC)