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Qu'Appelle, Saskatchewan

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because there are concerns over the form of this article as listed on the Talk Page.

Thanks, Michellecrisp (talk) 06:45, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

This is written with the POV of somebody who is very bitter that Regina was made the capital of Saskatchewan with many, many run-on sentences. The formatting is also unorthodox for a location article with the lists that aren't written as bullet points (or as complete sentences). Some examples:
 * See talk page regarding Regina issue and giving the late 1800's point of view in the newspaper of the times of the scandal created by naming Regina, an actual literal pile of buffalo bones with no settlement as the capital of the NWT instead of Qu'Appelle a bustling 600 plus populous and the main distribution center at the CPR rail line terminus.SriMesh | talk  03:00, 20 September 2008 (UTC)


 * With (a) its for a time seemingly long-term terminus status for the Canadian Pacific Railway; (b) its lush rolling parkland setting, intermittent "coulees" (in Canadian prairie terminology gentle valleys with steady-flowing creeks) and "bluffs" (the local term for aspen groves, frequently surrounding sloughs) and generally picturesque locale both in summer and winter and (c) its ready access to ample water
 * This is very awkward.
 * This sentence is re-worded without the alphabetic point format and made into prose alone. SriMesh |  talk  03:10, 20 September 2008 (UTC)


 * It was — as demonstrated by its now entirely historical commemoration as the historical see city of the Anglican Diocese of Qu'Appelle — at one point the obvious choice as the capital of the North-West [sic] Territories. The choice of Regina as the Territorial headquarters was a national scandal in the 1880s: there was an "obvious conflict of interest" in Lieutenant-Governor Edgar Dewdney's promoting of Pile-of-Bones, as the site of the future Regina was then called, as the territorial headquarters,[4] but until 1897, when responsible government was accomplished in the Territories,[5] the lieutenant-governor and council governed by fiat and there was little legitimate means of challenging such decisions outside the federal capital of Ottawa, where the Territories were remote and of little concern.
 * Using dashes for parenthetical references is unusual. The second sentence is also an incredible run-on.
 * RE-worded, and added a quotation with citation template reference. SriMesh |  talk  03:00, 20 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Many Qu'Appelle children of the late 19th and early 20th centuries recounted frightening encounters with angry Cree and "half breeds" — nowadays the latter, actually not strictly speaking francophone Métis but Bungee-speaking Countryborn, would be deemed Anglo-Métis — who not unreasonably bore a considerable grudge against white settlers in the Qu'Appelle region.
 * This sentence is just loaded. We have unnecessary and offensive adjectives ("angry" Cree?), parenthetical references that make the sentence almost incomprehensible and POV.
 * Will continue to look for references. Maria Campbell's book Hal-Breed was already listed regarding first nations reactions, and there is also Reaction to German Immigration Letter from D. Henry Starr showing settlers reactions to immigrants.  There was a mix of cultures, will try to find a reference for this other angle looking at yet another culture from anther's perspective as well.
 * There, a quotation has been added which repeats the statement and shows that the rebellion between metis and settlers affected the clash of cultures.SriMesh | talk  05:22, 20 September 2008 (UTC)

This whole article really needs to be redone because virtually every section has something that requires work. The formatting is awkward and makes editing difficult too. dzhastin (talk) 19:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * As a note completed most of the automatic peer reviewer advice to date. From the auto peer reviewer the intro may still need work as they are usually done last for the best overall summary of articles.  Will look for more long sentences.  Kind Regards SriMesh |  talk  03:00, 20 September 2008 (UTC)