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R.E.M. (band)
This article was drastically revamped by a Collaboration of the Week by WikiProject Alternative music a few months back; it was passed as a Good Article about a week later. I'm hoping to take this article to FAC in the next week or so after I add a few more things. I would mainly appreciate a copyedit, and any other concerns you might have. I'm hoping this article can eventually serve as a model for future musical group FAs. Thanks. WesleyDodds (talk) 10:03, 9 December 2007 (UTC)

M3tal H3ad

 * Following years of underground success, R.E.M. entered the mainstream - possibly link Underground music and Mainstream (terminology), not everyone knows what these terms mean.
 * A question as such, you introduce the band with the singular "is" then later refer to them as a plural "their", "they" and "were", is this ok as it switches between the two often?
 * It's definitely supposed to be singular ("is"); I'll have to comb through the article and fix that soon. WesleyDodds (talk) 11:43, 9 December 2007 (UTC)


 * For the musicians first mention in the body it would be suitable to tell the reader what instruments they each play (i had to scroll to the lead to find out)
 * R.E.M. had recorded its debut EP - link EP at its first mention, not everyone knows what the term is
 * Fixed. WesleyDodds (talk) 08:09, 16 December 2007 (UTC)


 * A positive review of the EP by NME - you need to attribute the review and quotes to the person who said them, that one person does not represent the entire magazine
 * The writer is credited in the citation. If this were the EP's aricle I'd be more inclined to mention the author by name in the prose, but to mention him in the prose of this article would be awkward and unnecessary. WesleyDodds (talk) 08:09, 16 December 2007 (UTC)


 * and reached number 78 in 1983 - where? on the Billboard Hot 100 (America) i assume?
 * Fixed. WesleyDodds (talk) 08:07, 16 December 2007 (UTC)


 * The band found the sessions unexpectedly difficult, what exactly does "sessions" refer to here (I'm guessing recording)
 * Fixed. WesleyDodds (talk) 08:07, 16 December 2007 (UTC)


 * the Fables singles were mostly ignored at mainstream radio - by mainstream radio?
 * The source uses the phrasing "at mainstream radio" so I thought I'd stick with that. WesleyDodds (talk) 11:43, 9 December 2007 (UTC)


 * under President Ronald Reagan, - perhaps worth nothing he was the American president
 * Fixed WesleyDodds (talk) 11:52, 9 December 2007 (UTC)


 * link hernia, had to search what it was
 * Fixed. WesleyDodds (talk) 08:07, 16 December 2007 (UTC)


 * reached number 57 on the American pop charts - and peaked at #13 on the Billboard charts - one is spelt out and one uses numbers, keep consistent
 * Fixed WesleyDodds (talk) 11:52, 9 December 2007 (UTC)


 * All Music Guide states - Stephen Thomas Erlewine wrote the biography so the quote should be appropriately attributed
 * According to the Los Angeles Times - as above
 * Reference 54's publisher reads - USAToday.com.com
 * Fixed WesleyDodds (talk) 11:52, 9 December 2007 (UTC)

I'm not exactly the best peer reviewer and no doubt only a handful of these comments will be helpful, but the article is in pretty good shape and i could only spot these minor things out, good job. If only the Metal project had something as half decent as the Alternative project does with activity and helpful reviewers...i can keep dreaming. M3tal H3ad (talk) 11:29, 9 December 2007 (UTC)
 * We can both keep dreaming. :) LuciferMorgan (talk) 17:01, 10 December 2007 (UTC)

LuciferMorgan

 * "While rehearsing for the ceremony, the band recorded a cover of John Lennon's "#9 Dream" for "Instant Karma: The Amnesty International Campaign to Save Darfur," a tribute album benefiting Amnesty International, as well as releasing the song as a single for the album and the campaign, "#9 Dream" was Berry's first studio recording with the band since his departure almost a decade earlier." - This really long sentence needs to be cut into two. LuciferMorgan (talk) 17:01, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
 * "Stipe had suggested the new album would be "primitive and howling," and the band had released a stark political protest song called "Final Straw" free over the Internet during the invasion of Iraq, leading fans to expect a return to roots." - Try to avoid redundant words like "new". The album is currently three years old, and the statement will be old when R.E.M. release a new album. LuciferMorgan (talk) 17:03, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
 * "Out of Time's lead single "Losing My Religion" became the group's most successful track release when it reached number four on the Billboard charts." - "Most successful" is an opinion. "Highest charting Billboard single" or something similar would be more appropriate to say. LuciferMorgan (talk) 17:05, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
 * "A lush pop album, Out of Time boasts a wider array of sounds than their previous releases." - According to whom? LuciferMorgan (talk) 17:06, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
 * "Stipe had suggested the new album would be "primitive and howling," and the band had released a stark political protest song called "Final Straw" free over the Internet during the invasion of Iraq, leading fans to expect a return to roots." - The fact that the song is "stark" is one's own personal interpretation, and is therefore original research. Also, the mention of fans expectations is mere speculation. LuciferMorgan (talk) 00:40, 13 December 2007 (UTC)
 * All those items (expect the "Losing My Religion" bit) are left over from the pre-COTW version of the page. I will fix them soon. WesleyDodds (talk) 11:23, 13 December 2007 (UTC)

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