Wikipedia:Peer review/Raff & Gammon/archive1

Raff & Gammon
I've listed this article for peer review because I wonder what other people will think about it. I am worried that there is something wrong with the article and I need someone to help me out. I also doing this to learn more about creating articles and how I can create a better one.

Sincerely, Analog Horror, ( Speak ) 03:26, 18 March 2020 (UTC)

Comments from Thatoneweirdwikier
Apologies for the long wait! Here are a few of my comments: That's honestly it. I might take a look to see if there are any other sources that can help to expand the article. Thatone weird wikier &#124; Say hi 10:45, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Generally, it should be clear as to whether "Raff & Gammon" means "the company" or "the founders".
 * "...who were really interested in it..." Remove the word "really".
 * Personally, I think the section "Fall of the Kinetoscope Company" needs to be more neutral.

Extra references
Below, I've listed some references that may help to expand the article:
 * Hope this helps. Thatone weird wikier &#124; Say hi 10:58, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
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 * Hope this helps. Thatone weird wikier &#124; Say hi 10:58, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Hope this helps. Thatone weird wikier &#124; Say hi 10:58, 14 May 2020 (UTC)