Wikipedia:Peer review/Randall Flagg/archive1

Randall Flagg
I'm trying to get this article to become Featured Article, so any suggestions on improvements (such as unverified claims or grammatical errors) would be greatly appreciated.--CyberGhostface 18:33, 18 November 2006 (UTC)


 * Merely my opinions---"so the appearance of a character whose initials are R.F. sometimes serves to clue in readers to Flagg's presence." sounds like OR---get a source to support statement. "a Lovecraft character that he may have been based upon" need to cite. "the last of which most likely stands for Crimson King," Cite. "is more popular among King's fans" is this really in the cited reference?  "In Eyes of the Dragon, he is described as an aged wizard that eventually reveals itself to be demonic in nature, and in The Gunslinger, he describes himself, under his true name of Walter o'Dim, as an "Ageless Stranger". You gave the book, but not the page numbers.  The motivations section seems entirely original research.  "Death" section also seems to be largely Original Research... you keep saying what the fans say, but where is that coming from?  Your own knowledge?  It may be true, but it looks like OR.  The Dark Tower and Eyes of the Dragon sections felt long to me.  Balloonman 09:25, 19 November 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 18:22, 19 November 2006 (UTC)


 * This article is miles off reaching featured status because it's written from an in universe perspective. This needs tons of work, and loads more inline citations. Something worth noting is that this character isn't real, though the article largely talks like he is.


 * 1) "Origins" - The character's fictional origins have been stated. This was real disappointing. If done correctly, this article would deal with Randall Flagg's concept and creation - when, where and how Stephen King got inspired to create the character. Maybe he had rough ideas which changed throughout its initial inception etc. LuciferMorgan 03:37, 2 December 2006 (UTC)