Wikipedia:Peer review/Raul Casanova/archive1

Raul Casanova
I've listed this article for peer review because I think it's okay but could be better. Any criticism or suggestions are welcome.

Thanks,

Alex (talk) 00:58, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

It's unsourced and unformatted, no lead, etc. This is a Secret account 03:18, 26 November 2007 (UTC)


 * Not bad, but it could use some more work. Section breaks would be especially helpful because he has had a long career (17 years).  See Joe Nathan and Lee Smith (baseball) for two examples of well-organized articles about baseball players. Shalom (Hello • Peace) 02:29, 28 November 2007 (UTC)


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 * The one-paragraph sections are distracting. The titles seem to be intentionally poking fun at the man: Back to the Minors - Return to the Majors -To the Minors Again- In the Majors Once More - either find a source that says that this is funny (is it a general consensus among sportswriters?) or don't poke fun. "He is 6'0" tall and he weighs 230 pounds (one source puts him as low as 192)." does not belong in the lead, unless his 40 pound weight fluctuation is a major part of his notability. The whole article needs a lot more references, see WP:CITE. --AnonEMouse (squeak) 14:20, 11 December 2007 (UTC)