Wikipedia:Peer review/Redcliffe Padres/archive1

Redcliffe Padres
This peer review discussion has been closed. I want to get this up to good article status over the holidays and just would like a general guideline of content to be added and edited.

Thanks,  JRA _ Westy Qld2  Talk 05:20, 20 November 2009 (UTC)


 * Comments from NatureBoyMD
 * The lead should be longer (about 2-3 paragraphs per WP:LEAD).
 * Dates should be unlinked.
 * From the perspective of an American who is very familiar with baseball in the U.S., the article is often confusing. What is PCYC? Major grades? Minor grads? This information needs some explaining.
 * Baseball terms (run batted in, home run, etc.) need to be linked at first occurrence.
 * The history section needs to be expanded. There is a lot of info about the 2008-09 season, just a little about seasons before that, and really nothing prior to 2001.
 * En dashes need to be used for date ranges (ex 2008–09). Sometimes the article uses dashes or a solidus (that's a "slash" to you and me).
 * Consider hard coding the roster, so you can symbols/terms that apply to Australian baseball (if different) and so there isn't a link to other MLB team rosters.
 * Watch the use of "currently". Use "as of [date]" instead.
 * More references are needed, especially for the "notable players" section.
 * There needs to be some inclusion criteria for "notable players". Why are they notable?
 * See also sections are unnecessary when the terms are already linked in the article.
 * A good copyedit for grammar, punctuation, and style is in order.
 * External links generally come after the reference section.
 * The references need to be formatted using the same style and include all possible information (author, title, source, publication date, access date, etc.)
 * Is it possible to find a better logo in .png or .svg format? The present image is a stretched and distorted .jpg.

This may be more than you are looking for, but I feel compelled to list everything that stuck out to me. Let me know if you need more information or need something clarified; I'll be happy to help. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 01:48, 21 November 2009 (UTC)