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Republic of China

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2009.

This peer review discussion has been closed. The article has recently been promoted to GA status, and I would like to improve it further to make it a featured article. Any input on how to improve the article would be appreciated.

Thanks, Laurent (talk) 21:24, 14 July 2009 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: This is broad and possibly comprehensive, generally well-written, well-illustrated, and mostly verifiable. I made quite a few minor proofreading changes as I read through the article, although I'm sure I didn't fix everything. For example, names of newspapers such as China Daily in the main text or in the citations should appear in italics. I'd suggest another proofreading by a fresh set of eyes. The layout has several problems associated with image placement, and I note a few other problems below.

Images
 * MOS:IMAGES says in part, "Avoid sandwiching text between two images that face each other." The map in the "History" section makes an unfortunate text sandwich with the infobox. Another text sandwich occurs in the "Potential military conflict" subsection, another in the "Government" section, and, at least on my computer screen, between the last two images in the "Military" section.
 * MOS:IMAGES also says, "Images should be inside the section they belong to (after the heading and after any links to other articles), and not above the heading." On my screen, IMAGE:Chiang Kai-shek in full uniform.jpeg overlaps two sections, as does IMAGE:Surface-to-Air Missile Coverage over the Taiwan Strait.png.
 * MOS:IMAGES also says, "Do not place left-aligned images directly below a subsection-level heading (=== or lower), as this sometimes disconnects the heading from the text that follows it. This can often be avoided by shifting left-aligned images down a paragraph or two." IMAGE:Chinese republic forever.jpg violates this guideline, as does IMAGE:Taiwanarmspic1.jpg.
 * MOS:IMAGES also says, "Use Commons to link to more images on Commons, wherever possible. The use of galleries should be in keeping with Wikipedia's image use policy." The choice of whether to use a gallery or not seems to be somewhat open, but the most common practice is to remove the galleries from the article itself and to provide a link to galleries on the Commons. That is what I would suggest here since the article is well-illustrated and includes, in some cases, duplicates of the gallery photos, and you have provided a link to the Commons gallery.

General comments


 * A good rule of thumb for sourcing is to cite every direct quotation, every set of statistics, every claim that is likely to be challenged, and every paragraph. It would be a good idea to add a source for the few paragraphs in the article, outside of the lead, that include no sources at all. An example would be the first paragraph of the "History" section.


 * Captions that consist of one sentence fragment don't take a terminal period.


 * The dabfinder tool that lives here finds seven links in the article that go to disambiguation pages rather than their intended target. You can use the tool to see what and where they are.


 * The link checker tool that lives here finds seven dead links in the citations.

Current political issues
 * "It eventually led to the creation of a political camp led by Ex-DPP leader Shih Ming-teh which believe the President should resign than stay in disgrace; forming a 3 side standoff." - Lowercase "e" on "ex". "Three-sided" rather than "3 side". "Believes" rather than "believe". Suggestion: "It eventually led to the creation of a political camp led by ex-DPP leader Shih Ming-teh that believes the President should resign rather than stay in disgrace." The phrase about the three-sided standoff is not entirely clear to me. What are the three sides? Perhaps it would be good to turn the phrase after the semicolon into a complete sentence that names the three sides.

"Economy''
 * "By 1945, an hyperinflation was in progress in China and Taiwan... " - Delete "an"? Wikilink hyperinflation?
 * "As of 2005, $50bn have been invested in China... "$50 billion"?
 * "Although this is generally good for the economy of Taiwan, some Taiwanese expressed worries about this situation, arguing that Taiwan becomes increasingly dependent of the economy of China." - Verb tenses. "on" instead of "of"? Suggestion: "Although this is generally good for the economy of Taiwan, some Taiwanese have expressed worries about this situation, arguing that Taiwan has become increasingly dependent on the economy of China."
 * "The ROC often joins international organizations under a politically neutral name. The ROC is a member of... ". - Verb tenses. "has often joined" rather than "often joins"? "has been a member of" rather than "is a member of"?

Religion
 * "There are approximately over 18,718,600 religious followers in Taiwan... " - "approximately" or "over"?

Birth rate
 * The Manual of Style generally deprecates extremely short paragraphs and extremely short sentences. Two solutions are to expand or merge. The "birth rate" subsection might reasonably be merged with the introductory paragraph to "Demographics". Merging might also work for the orphan paragraph that ends the "Education" section and the first and last paragraphs of the "Public health" section.

References
 * Page ranges such as those in citation 23 take en dashes rather than hyphens, thus: pp. 22–23.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 03:04, 20 July 2009 (UTC)