Wikipedia:Peer review/Resident Evil 5/archive1

Resident Evil 5
We have brought this article to GA-status and would like to ultimately get it to FA-status. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks,  StarScream1007  ►Talk  16:10, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Comment(s) from ProtoDrake
I may come back to this, but something I will say at once is that all refs that can be archived should be archived. Some of them, such as the CVG links will be dead now as the site has closed down. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:21, 4 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the suggestions . I've archived the dead link, and will endeavour to archive the others soon. Freikorp (talk) 14:31, 5 November 2015 (UTC)

So sorry it took be so long to get back here. It completely slipped my mind. A few things I spotted. That's what I saw. If you like, if/when you've commented on these, I can go through a third time to see if I missed anything. --ProtoDrake (talk) 16:56, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
 * With reference to my first note above, live urls should also be updated to their current versions.
 * I think the leads needs expanding a little, including perhaps mentioning development time.
 * "Resident Evil 5‍‍ '​‍s gameplay was similar to that of the previous installment, and producer Jun Takeuchi said that themes from the original game were used." - What themes are these? I feel these needs some minor elucidation before an FA nomination.
 * I think you should elaborate a little on the mechanism of the virtual camera system for our benefit (not explain it all, just enough to be sensible and communicate understanding), because when I first glanced at it, I thought it meant the in-game camera.
 * Many other issues I might have raised have already been raised in David Fuchs' comments below.

Comments by David Fuchs
Ping me if I haven't responded by tomorrow. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 16:53, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

Okay, my initial comments are as follows:
 * Prose
 * Resident Evil 5‍‍ ' ‍s plot involves an investigation by Chris Redfield and Sheva Alomar of a terrorist threat in Kijuju, a fictional region of Africa. — might want to mention who Redfield and Sheva are. Agents? Civilians? Clowns?
 * Like its predecessor Resident Evil 4, although players cannot run and shoot at the same time they can upgrade weapons with money and treasure and heal themselves with herbs. — I don’t follow why run-and-gun mechanics are implied to be a tradeoff with upgraded weapons and healing. Split these into separate clauses.
 * Players are separated at points during gameplay; if one player has critical health, only their partner can resuscitate them. — so if they’re separated, do you just die when you reach critical health? That’s the implication of this passage.
 * A version of the Mercenaries minigame which debuted in Resident Evil 3 is included in Resident Evil 5. This paragraph seems a bit inverted, in that I don’t really learn until the end of the paragraph what Mercenaries actually is.
 * Chris, Sheva and Delta Team close in on Irving, but he escapes with the aid of a hooded figure. Wesker leaves documents which lead Chris and Sheva to marshy oilfields where Irving's deal is to occur, but they discover that the documents are a diversion. Wesker having any role in the main plot comes out of the blue here, and it feels like we’re missing a sentence or some context.
 * where Chris Redfield and Jill Valentine infiltrate one of Oswell E. Spencer's estates in 2006—who is Oswell Spencer and why is the year particularly important?
 * In spots throughout the article the text uses parentheticals, such as and he was disappointed in the controls taken (he felt) from Resident Evil 4, and in the lead discussing the racism allegations. These really don’t have an encyclopedic tone and sound like editorializing.
 * On the same lines, the lead says the game was criticized (initially) for racism. There’s no statement in the article that backs that up, and the entire allegations of racism section seems really weird to me; why is pre-release reactions put after post-release criticism and praise? It can probably be condensed and put into the release section, since that’s where it talks about the trailers. Are there any sources that offer a more aggregated summation of the points, rather than having a back-and-forth of individual opinions?
 * Images :
 * File:Resi5gameplay.jpg really needs a stronger fair use rationale. Right now it’s basically being used to show the two main characters and illustrate an over-the-shoulder perspective, which is pretty weak. A shot more demonstrative of gameplay or illustrating a specific part described (revival mechanic, etc.) might be a better choice.
 * References :
 * References all look reliable; will do a spot check for accuracy later.

— Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 16:03, 12 November 2015 (UTC)